WOW factor - 8/10

The WOW for me came in the fact that Yunho was willing to give up his archangel status to be with Jaejoong. I could understand the deep feelings of guilt and remorse he felt at his actions of personally ripping the wings of the one he loved the most, and how much he wanted to reunite with Jaejoong and to be together with him again even in the depths of Hell.

Writing Style - 7/10

The writing style is quite descriptive and the events described, from the movements of the characters to the facial expressions to the punishment sequence which was relived by our characters, were very easy to visualize and I could see the action in my head as if it leapt off a TV screen. Even the more minor details such as the broken feathers on Jaejoong's back were available in my mind's eye as I read the story.

General Structure - 7/10

The flow is good and there is almost nothing which can break the flow of the story, except for when you described Yunho's eyes as obsidians. It's a pet peeve of mine, and is quite an overused metaphor for eyes.

Descriptive Influence - 5/5

As mentioned earlier I was able to witness the events of the story as if it was showing on a TV screen in front of me. It really contributed to the enjoyment of the story.

Overall score: 65/90

Report card rating = 72% 

65-74% = GOOD! But some specific areas need refining

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