WOW factor - 4/10

The story didn't exactly WOW me in the positive ways at all... but when you take out the bad and look at the good -> you can visualize how everything is and that sort of wrote an aww in my mind.

Writing Style - 8/10

The flow wasn't broken at all since the POV used was marvelously done. The story felt smooth the whole way through and didn't jump from here and there.

General Structure - 1.5/10

I understand that English might not be your strong point nor is it your native tongue - that can be forgiven of course. Try reading and writing more - you will definitely improve in time, m'dear ^^ If you have time, head on over to my editing shop and read the tips section. 

Descriptive Influence - 2/5

The story as a whole was enjoyable ~ from visualization to grasping the characters' personalities, this was done nicely. The only problem I found was of course... it being recycled - I mentioned this a bit too much but it's a fact that I can put my finger around.

Overall score: 43/90 [48%]

Report card rating = 40-49% = FAIR but needs improvement in all general areas 

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Question & Answer time with TheParakeet

Is this story boring or too long or too wordy?

Your description of the story is actually pretty interesting. You managed to establish that ChanYeol is a writer, and you have managed to imply that the story he's writing will have a different ending compared to how the actual story will play out.

The story seems to be a slice of life. The interactions between Chanyeol and the other EXO members do have that lighthearted vibe to it. We can also see the internal conflict that goes on inside Chanyeol when his editor insists on him writing a happy ending but he does not want to.

And the fact that Chanyeol has dedicated his novel to this one girl, our OC, is good for drawing in readers.

But what does it mean when he clicks his tongue?

Really, tell me. I did not understand that at all.