Title: The Bonding

Author: MyCockiness

Reviewer: Gwentree

Title:  (5/5) The title is great because it pulls the reader in by hinting at the idea of the story without giving it away, It's titles like these that I wish you could see more often.

Foreword & Description: (8/10) The foreword tells you a small piece of the story without giving it all away. It also hints at the darker side of the story. I don't know if that was what you intended or not, but it's most definately there.

Grammar, Spelling, etc.: (10/15) The spelling is excelent, but I noticed points were the tense changed and where dialog seemed unclear with who was speaking. If you fix these, this score would go all the way up.

Plot Line: (20/20) The plot line is there and that's clear. As every chapter unfolds, you reveal a little more. It seems to be going at a good pace, so you don't need to speed up or slow down the story speed.

Flow: (10/10) It works well because of the well defined plot line. If you have the plot line, the flow should come naturally like it does in this case.

Originality: (8/10) The story is using new ideas, but you are lacking new characters and thus new couples. Because of this, the story ties in with other Taoris, Hunhan, Kaisoo, etc. stories.

Characters: (5/10) All of your characters are real people, but you have worked on their personalities a little bit. This helps make them seem more like your characters, but OCs are always good. They make the story seem much more original.

Overall Enjoyment:  (10/10) You have a story here that really caught my attention. I am most definately an EXOtic, so this was definately suited to my interests.

Bonuses: (10/10) You have figured out how to make a story that I really enjoy and would read again and again. Seeing how that can be hard to do, you deserve the bonus points.

(86/100)

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