Title: Flight of Time

Author: Katakatika

Reviewer: PandaChels

Title:  (4/5) When I first read the title, I was slightly confused at the meaning. It pulled me into the story, making me wonder what exactly the story was about. However, when I found out that Kibum was sick and running out of time, I liked it a lot, although it’s still a little confusing to me.

Foreword & Description: (10/10) It automatically grabbed my attention! The description showed that it was going to be sad, but when you read the description, it gave us an idea about how he would be sick and not have much time left. (Also, it tied it to the title automatically!)

Grammar, Spelling, etc.: (14/15) There were a few mistakes here and there, mostly grammar, but it was not that bad. When it came to the length of paragraphs and the syntax of the sentences, it went well and helped the story flow easily!

Plot Line: (19/20)  I loved the story so much. You made it really centered on one thing, Kibum’s sickness. The fact that you spent so much detail on Kibum’s disease showed a lot. As the reader was able to read the symptoms of Kibum’s disease and how he felt, it gave us a way to see the way he does and feel as much pain as him.

Flow: (9/10) The flow was really good and kept me interested. The only fault that I found was whenever you would suddenly change the 3^rd POV to Jonghyun’s(?) The example I have is in chapter six when Key falls asleep very quickly and starts to have an attack. I think you should have put some space between the parts to show that some time passed between when he passed out and when Jonghyun saw him having the attack.

Originality: (8/10) Although the idea of lovers being separated by illnesses is not original, this story was slightly different by pushing right into the scene and not having anything before it. Also, a lot of authors will try to give the characters a happy ending, which you acted like you did, but in fact I believe that Kibum will die.

Characters: (10/10) Perfect. Kibum was the perfect sick person and Jonghyun was the best boyfriend, overprotective and loving! I loved them so much. Also, the girl with the cancer…. <3 Amazing job with the characters and personalities!

Overall Enjoyment:  (9/10) I liked it a lot However, there are very few fics that I utterly love to death! J

Bonuses: (9/10) I personally loved it since I want to be a doctor, so yeah! Hehe, I love things mostly involving medical situations so this was a personal favorite of mine! I want to see how this ends! :D Plus, I ship Jongkey!

(92/100)

Also, please re-read your stories if you have the time and make a few correction! ^-^

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