Title: Heartfelt Voice

Author: GreenGardenPop

Reviewer: Gwentree

Title:  (5/5) The title makes you want to know more about what it could possibly mean. Also, it is a creative way to title the story and pull readers in.

Foreword & Description: (10/10) It is an interesting foreword that makes you want to read the story even more, and the description also helps with this. Besides this, they help to explain eachother.

Grammar, Spelling, etc.: (15/15) I can find no spelling or grammar errors in the story when I run it through Microsoft Word.

Plot Line: (18/20)  The plot line is there, but it's hard to follow. It would be better if you tried to show it faster without ruining the story. Otherwise, the story seems to be going by kind of slow.

Flow: (8/10)  It works, but without the plot line, not as much. If you fix the plot line, it will flow better.

Originality: (10/10)  This is a very original story with a very original idea behind it. It's hard to find a good story that includes a voice inside the character. This is the best one I've seen in a long time.

Characters: (10/10) You used people who were real, but you changed their personalities enough for them to be different people with the same names. It makes them much more original if you do it this way.

Overall Enjoyment:  (8/10) It was a good story, but it doesn't really suit my interests. It's hard to find something that fits my tastes, so don't worry about that.

Bonuses: (6/10) This is a great story, and I haven't reviewed anything with with perfect grammar and spelling before. Great job GreenGardenPop

(90/100)

Also, please re-read your stories if you have the time and make a few correction! ^-^

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