Title: Strange Attraction

Author: Shixotic

Reviewer: Gwentree

Title:  (5/5) The title is well thought out and helps to draw the reader into the story. It also adds to the mysterious feel of the story.

Foreword & Description: (10/10) It's not too long, and it adds suspence as you are waiting for what will come next. It also introduces the story without giving away anything that is actually in the dialouge somewhere. This is an unusual appearance, and I always find it enjoyable to not have to read the same thing in the beggining and then somewhere later in the story.

Grammar, Spelling, etc.: (15/15) Your grammar and spelling are perfect so far, and you make it clear who's prospective you are on multiple times throughout the chapter. That makes the story much easier to follow.

Plot Line: (20/20)  So far, the plot is moving along at a nice rate that doesn't give away too much at once. Keep at this rate if you wish or elongate the chapters and speed it up a little bit.

Flow: (10/10) It flows well because of the way you planned out the plot line. That really helps the story be more bearable because there is actually something there.

Originality: (5/10) It has a new kind of feel, but so far it's just another story about a guy chasing after a girl for his own selfish reasons.

Characters: (8/10) You had an OC which makes the characters more original. Also, you changed the characters that were real people in ways that it was more believable that they were different people.

Overall Enjoyment:  (5/10) I enjoy stories that flow well and have correct tenses, but the whole guy chases girl think is not so much my style. Thus, I will give you half the points.

Bonuses: (10/10) Perfect spelling and grammar!!!

(88/100)

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