Title: Oneshot: The second chance

Author: Chquine

Reviewer: KreiKrei

Title:  (3/5) The title is common, especially if it’s a B.A.P fic, most people tend to use song titles as their title for their fan fic. It’s alright if you want to use the song as the title, but it would be better if you could use a line from the song that struck you.

Foreword & Description: (8/10) The foreword and description is kinda plain to me, you could spice it up a little more to attract more readers. I like how you put a character chart and not give away much of the information about the guys.

Grammar, Spelling, etc.: (15/15) Well I really saw nothing wrong with the grammar and spelling. So full points for you, congrats on that :)

Plot Line: (17/20) Well I haven't really read that much so I can't score this properly. But it would be more interesting if the number of your chapters are more than what I have reviewed.

Flow: (10/10) I like the flow of your story, you don't drag it too much and you don't fast forward things. Plus your note at the second chapter about them having a distrusting relationship at first is a very good decision. It would be unrealistic if they start with having mutual feelings towards each other.

Originality: (9/10) I haven't read a fic like yours but I'm pretty sure that there's a story like this somewhere out there. So I suggest that you make more twist to make it more outstanding.

Characters: (9/10) I have no problems with your characters. They stick with how you characterized them. But I do worry about your OC, don't make her too plain. Since others tend to make their OCs plain so that the leading man would notice how different she is, but that's what actually is wrong. They make the OC too plain, so I suggest that you avoid doing that.

Overall Enjoyment:  (8/10) I'm not really fond of OC fics but merely because they make the OC to be Mary Sue, but yours isn't so I kinda enjoyed reading it.

Bonuses: (10/10) For making it easy to read and not hurt my eye for coloring the text and also because I really like how you describe things.

(89/100)

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