(Punishment)

Title:  4/5

I love how you connected your title to the fic in the forward, but I don’t see what the title has to do with the fic besides the fact that Sehun’s mother died.  

Foreword/Description: 10/10

Forward/Description is perfect. The way it is structured and formatted, and the writing is just perfect. After reading the forward I can honestly say I wanted to continue reading, and that’s what a forward is there for, so good job.

Appearance: 5/5

Nothing wrong with the appearance. I love the heading you have to start off each chapter. It is similar to what Elephant and I do in our fics.

Plot: 10/20

Although your writing is so beautiful I could cry, your plot is too basic. I’m not even sure what the plot is. Is it Sehun’s mother’s death? Is it Sehun overreacting and thinking Luhan was cheating on him? Is it Luhan’s little ‘black-out’ moment? I’m not exactly sure.

Mechanics: 20/20

I found no errors reading this fic. The grammar is on point, I found nothing wrong with spelling, and your use of vocabulary is amazing. I love your wide range of vocabulary, I never get tired of a certain word. Keep up with your writing.

Characterization: 15/20

Characters are not fully developed, but I can still determine what the character’s personalities are like without you having to put a character chart. I commend you for not using a character chart, those irk the hell out of me.

Flow/Style: 15 /15

The fic flows accordingly. I don’t feel like anything was too rushed, or dragging. Your writing style is too beautiful for words.

Overall Enjoyment: 4/5

I’m not into , but your writing style is so beautiful I enjoyed reading.

Total:  83/100