CALLING HYUNVIRUS 

Reviewed by chasonwooyunkey

Title : Uhm, it's really confusing, but when you really read the story, you'll understand the Title...                                 4/5

Foreword & Description : The foreword is great, but there is something, lacking on the foreword :)                                    9/10

Characterization : At first i really don't know what was Hyejin's role, and then later it was understandable..           8/10

Originality : I never read a story like this so, I'll give a perfect score.                                                                                                  15/15

Plot :  Well, the plot has many holes like it happened for a no reason, or it happened so fast..                                               11/15

Spelling Grammar :                                                                                                                                                                                                         19/25

You need to be careful of your grammar, spellings and spacing..

" You turned around slowly & smirked, knowing who it was immediately "

- It's like " immediately the ...... " and then you just wrote immediately, what happened next, so you should be careful on your grammar.

It should be :

→ "  You turned around slowly & smirked, knowing who it was "

→  " You immediately turn around & smirk, knowing who it was "

" You laughed out loud, some glancing your in a weird way "

- grammar again....

It should be :

→ " You laughed out loud,some people were glancing at you in a weird way "

" You let him walk towards you, you standing in the middle of the hallway "

- Still Grammar !

→ " You were standing in the middle of the hallway, letting him walk towards you "

" He stopped looking at your from up to down.

-GRAMMAR !

→ " He stopped in front of you and was looking at you from head to toe "

" You was going to shame him until he couldn't show his face anymore "

- Grammar !

→ " You were going to embarrass him, until he couldn't show his face anymore "

" Because no matter how many simplistic girls fall on your feet, Your'enothing compared to me "

- Be careful of your spacing and your apostrophe.

→ " Because no matter how many simplistic girls fall on your feet, You're nothing compared to me "

" You looking like a fruit festival "

- Grammar ..

→ " You look like a fruit festival "

" You can feel myself going near him "

- Grammar..

→ " You can feel yourself going near him "

→ "I can feel myself going near him "

Flow : The story is understandable, but at first i was kinda confused.                                                                                              7/10

Enjoyment : The story was funny, but the reader will be confused because of the grammars...                                          6/10

TOTAL :  79 / 100

*Reviewer's Note :

Thank you for requesting :)

I hope i did not offend you.. (╯︵╰,)