☑ anastasiaeka
Colloquial Mini Reviews ★ (╥﹏╥) ★ ☰ CLOSED24 STORY INFORMATION:
GENRE/S: ROMANCE, DRAMA
MAIN CHARACTERS: im YOONA, KWON YURI, AND LEE DONGHAE
STATUS: ON-GOING
CHAPTER COUNT: 8 CHAPTERS
STORY DESCRIPTION: YOONA AND YURI USED TO BE BESTFRIEND, THAT NOT WHEN YOONA REALIZED THAT SHE HAD A CRUSH ON HER FRIEND. IT TURNED COMPLICATED, UNTIL THE DAY THEY GOT INTO REALLY HUGE FIGHT, THEY DECIDED TO GO SEPARATE WAYS. FOUR YEARS LATER, WHEN YOONA WAS ABOUT TO MARRY A GUY NAMED DONGHAE, SHE MEET AGAIN WITH YURI WHO HAPPENED TO BE HER WEDDING PLANNER.
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INCOMPLETION story LINK | ANASTASIAEKA| JAN. 24, 2015
STRENGTHS:
(1) point of view used
you used yoona's point of view, which was preferrable for me, especially since it's easier to get closer and adapt through her side of the story. moreover, it had seemed fitting, especially since the story did revolve around her, as she had feeling with yuri then had a fiance (donghae) afterwards. sometimes, i did feel like it would've been easier if you used a third person's point of view, so to avoid that, i guess try to elaborate yoona's feelings, somehow. like, explore her feelings. don't just narrate what she does all the time.
(2) an original plot... somehow
truthfully, the plot kind of reminds me of a few stories that i have read in the past, but what makes your story special is yoona's connection with yuri. the typical move that yoona did though was to leave yuri behind and sort of "move on," and then she finds herself a fiance. anyhow, the plot was really interesting, especially s
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