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Colloquial Mini Reviews ★ (╥﹏╥) ★ ☰ CLOSED10 STORY INFORMATION:
GENRE/S: ANGST, ROMANCE, SCHOOL LIFE
MAIN CHARACTERS: PARK CHANYEOL, CHOI YOO MI (OC) AND ZHANG YIXING
CHAPTER COUNT: 3 CHAPTERS
STORY DESCRIPTION: It did not matter what the others thought of them. For Choi Yoo Mi, an outcast, spending time with Chanyeol was all she needed. It did not matter that he sacrificed his popularity just to be with her, because in return she kept his most revered secret. At night, he would take her to Neverland, a place where dreams turned to reality, the night breathed with wonder, and stars could be picked from the sky like fruit from the trees. It did not matter that Yoo Mi was isolated in school, because Chanyeol always managed to sweep her off her feet, and whisk her away to Neverland. However, Chanyeol couldn't fill the loneliness that still lingers in her heart. Was Neverland really enough?
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AND HE TOOK HER TO NEVERLAND story LINK | GAKSITALGAKSITAL | FEB. 10, 2015
STRENGTHS:
(1) neverland + yoomi
surprisingly, i didn't find the story quite childish, as some might perceive it to be. normally, people would get sick of stories concerning peter pan or neverland, because, you know... anyway, it was really alluring to see how yoomi and neverland seem to fit together, as if it was a place where yoomi loosens up. good job!
(2) nice characterization
i don't know why you're a bit bothered by this section (well, at least that was what you said in the form), but i think that the characterization was fine; the s
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