☑ Hyeonhee
Colloquial Mini Reviews ★ (╥﹏╥) ★ ☰ CLOSED07 STORY INFORMATION:
GENRE/S: angst, HORROR, PSYCHOLOGICAL
MAIN CHARACTERS: LUHAN, SEHUN, EXO
CHAPTER COUNT: 6 CHAPTERS
STORY DESCRIPTION: "Welcome to Mary Elizabeth Mental Institute Dr.Lu!" An old man greeted me as he offered Luhan his right hand. Luhan grabbed his hand firmly and smiled a friendly smile at the middle aged man. That's how it all started. That's how Luhan ended up in such a mess. That's where he started to question the sanity of everyone. And most of all, Of himself.
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PSYCHOSIS story LINK | HYEONHEE | FEB. 07, 2015
STRENGTHS:
(1) GOOD VOCABULARY AND COMPREHENSION
YOUR COMPREHENSION WAS REALLY GOOD. I COULD ONLY COUNT THE GRAMMATICAL ERRORS THAT i ENCOUNTERED, AND MOST OF THEM CONCERNED THE TENSES USED. FOR EXAMPLE: /HE DIDN'T RESPONDED/ APART FROM THAT, YOUR GRAMMAR WAS REALLY GOOD, AND I AM GETTING THE FEELING THAT ENGLISH IS YOUR FIRST LANGUAGE. EITHER WAY, YOU DID WELL IN THIS SECTION, AND YOUR CHOICE OF WORDS REALLY COMPLEMENTED THE GENRES OF YOUR STORY. GOOD JOB!
(2) EFFECTIVE SUSPENSE!
WHAT I REALLY LIKED IN YOUR STORY WAS HOW EFFECTIVE YOUR UPDATES WERE, DESPITE THE SHORTNESS THAT I FOUND AS I READ THROUGH THEM. FOR INSTANCE, LUHAN'S CHARACTER HAD BEEN TROUBLING ME SINCE THE VERY BEGINNING. IT DIDN'T HELP THAT HIS POINT OF VIEW WAS USED. DESPITE HIS POV IN DISPLAY, YOU DIDN'T FAIL IN PORTRAYING THE SUSPENSE IN HIS PERSPEC
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