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Colloquial Mini Reviews ★ (╥﹏╥) ★ ☰ CLOSED22 STORY INFORMATION:
GENRE/S: MYSTERY, ROMANCE, SUPERNATURAL
MAIN CHARACTERS: SONG JOEUN (OC), KIM JONGIN AND DO KYUNGSOO
STATUS: ON-GOING
CHAPTER COUNT: 5 CHAPTERS
STORY DESCRIPTION: IT'S ABOUT A GIRL WHO HAS A SUPERNATURAL GIRL WHERE SHE COULD HEAL HERSELF, BUT ALSO CAUSE DESTRUCTION AND HARM TO OTHER PEOPLE. SHE HAD NEVER FELT PAIN BEFORE UNTIL SHE HAD TOUCHED THIS ONE BOY SHE HAD RISKED HER LIFE TO SAVE HIM.
HERE ARE A FEW REMINDERS PRIOR TO THIS REVIEW. FIRST OF ALL, DON'T FORGET TO CREDIT THE SHOP -- EITHER THE SHOP OR ME, YEOLWHO05, SO AS TO ACKNOWLEDGE THE EFFORT IN PROVIDING YOU THIS REVIEW. SECONDLY, MAKE SURE TO COMMENT AFTER PICKING YOUR REVIEW. DO PROVIDE YOUR FEEDBACK, IF POSSIBLE, AS WELL. i'D LIKE TO KNOW YOUR THOUGHTS ABOUT MY REVIEW, LIKE DID I SAY SOMETHING WRONG OR SOMETHING, OR WOULD YOU LIKE TO DEFEND YOUR STORY, ETC.? I'D BE GLAD TO ANSWER THEM ALL. ^^
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STRENGTHS:
(1) "ORIGINALITY VIBE"
THE VERY FIRST STRENGTH THAT I FOUND WAS HOW GOOD THE PLOT WAS, AS IF IT HAD THAT ORIGINAL VIBE AND EVERYTHING, THOUGH A COUPLE OF DOUBTFUL SCENES HAD EMERGED. LET'S TALK ABOUT THAT ON THE OTHER SECTION THOUGH. ANYWAY, I LIKE HOW THE PLOT DIDN'T SEEM LIKE THE TYPICAL SUPERNATURAL STORIES OUT THERE, WITH JONGIN HAVING POWERS AS WELL. THOUGH I CAN'T REALLY SAY MUCH SINCE THE STORY HASN'T PROGRESS THAT WELL YET, I DO HOPE THAT YOU MANAGE TO SHOW US MORE ORIGINALITY IN TERMS OF THE PLOT IN THE FUTURE.
(2) MYSTERY-QUALITY OF THE STORY.
MYSTERIES. I REALLY LOVE MYSTERIES, AND THE WAY YOU DROVE THOSE MYSTERIES IN YOUR STORY WAS SUPERB. YOU HAD KEPT ME GOING FROM CHAPTER TO CHAPTER, WHICH IS REALLY GOOD, SO AS TO MAKE YOUR READERS ANTICIPATE EVERY UPDATE THAT YOU MAKE.
(3) RELATIVITY OF THE "BEFORE" AND "AFTER" SCENES
THE THIRD STRENGTH THAT I FOUND WAS THE RELATIVITY YOU USED BETWEEN THE PAST SCENES AND THE FUTURE SCENES, HENCE THE BEFORE AND AFTER THAT YOU USED TO DRIVE THE STORY'S FLOW. TRUTHFULLY, THE BEFORE SCENES ARE MYSTERIES FOR ME, INDEED, THOUGH I DO KNOW THAT YOU'LL BE GIVING US A COUPLE OF TWISTS IN THE FUTURE, WHICH I AM LOOKING FORWAR
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