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❝사랑 & 정직❞ ʀᴇᴠɪᴇᴡ sʜᴏᴘ | Open |Can You Accept A Home-Wreker?
Title (4/5): I think that the title itself is pretty catchy and definately unique. It appears to catch the pot perfectly. However, points were taken off because each word in the title should be capitalized.
Like; Can You Accept A Homewreker?
Description/Foreword (8/10) : I think the description and foreword are well written. It introduced the characters and the plot. I think that the font is so small though, it's kind of hard to read. It is very interesting though.
Characterization (20/20): I think that Yeonri's character is well put together as well as Younghee. And especially Baekhyun. Yeonri is truly regretful about what she has done to Younghee in middle/high school, and that is good, but I guess love had to blind her. Anyways, they all fit their descriptions perfectly. I think that it was cool how you made them so obsessive and lovesick that thye would do anything for Baekhyun. In the story, I think you nailed the part where you said Baekhyun was a coward; he sure acted like one.
Plot/ Originality (17/20) : This story is much like a regular fanfic with a love triangle, cheating, etc. It's kind of exactly like dramas, so it's not very original. The plot is very well played out, with each character voicing their own opinions, the best friends, the betraying, the Baekhyun not defending her, I really loved all that joicy jazz.
Mechanics (Grammar, Spelling, Punctuation) (4/5) : I don't know if English is your first language or not, but I found no mistakes in spelling or grammar. I think in the angry parts though, there may be an overuse on exclamation marks.
Reader's Response (5/5): Many people are into your story and feel very strongly about Yeonir, Baekhyun and Younghee's actions. People feel that the characters are a bit delusional with love and they would love a sequel!
Overall Enjoyment (8/10): It was really nice to read, it was like a journal, but it seems sort of empty without dialouge except for the end. The end was sort of confusing because we didn't know who said what. Is the story complete though? Because some people are asking for a sequel and it isn't marked complete. The 'ending' is a bit incomplete... Anyways, good job!
Bonus 3/5 : The graphics are really pretty and the format is well. I find this story well written out. It switches points of views, which is another bonus.
Total: 69/75
Comments: Don't forget to leave a comment after reading this(:
Title (4/5): I think that the title itself is pretty catchy and definately unique. It appears to catch the pot perfectly. However, points were taken off because each word in the title should be capitalized.
Like; Can You Accept A Homewreker?
Description/Foreword (8/10) : I think the description and foreword are well written. It introduced the characters and the plot. I think that the font is so small though, it's kind of hard to read. It is very interesting though.
Characterization (20/20): I think that Yeonri's character is well put together as well as Younghee. And especially Baekhyun. Yeonri is truly regretful about what she has done to Younghee in middle/high school, and that is good, but I guess love had to blind her. Anyways, they all fit their descriptions perfectly. I think that it was cool how you made them so obsessive and lovesick that thye would do anything for Baekhyun. In the story, I think you nailed the part where you said Baekhyun was a coward; he sure acted like one.
Plot/ Originality (17/20) : This story is much like a regular fanfic with a love triangle, cheating, etc. It's kind of exactly like dramas, so it's not very original. The plot is very well played out, with each character voicing their own opinions, the best friends, the betraying, the Baekhyun not defending her, I really loved all that joicy jazz.
Mechanics (Grammar, Spelling, Punctuation) (4/5) : I don't know if English is your first language or not, but I found no mistakes in spelling or grammar. I think in the angry parts though, there may be an overuse on exclamation marks.
Reader's Response (5/5): Many people are into your story and feel very strongly about Yeonir, Baekhyun and Younghee's actions. People feel that the characters are a bit delusional with love and they would love a sequel!
Overall Enjoyment (8/10): It was really nice to read, it was like a journal, but it seems sort of empty without dialouge except for the end. The end was sort of confusing because we didn't know who said what. Is the story complete though? Because some people are asking for a sequel and it isn't marked complete. The 'ending' is a bit incomplete... Anyways, good job!
Bonus 3/5 : The graphics are really pretty and the format is well. I find this story well written out. It switches points of views, which is another bonus.
Total: 69/75
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