Title [3/5]

I've seen so much fics with the title Perfection. It's really not original at all. It matches the story well though because nothing can be put in perfection - it's just a matter of perspective.

Description/Foreword [8/10]

It's really nice, they way it's formatted. Everything that's supposed to be in italics was put in italics. It shows what the Kai thought of Sehun and what Luhan thought of Kai, but it didn't show what Luhan thought of Sehun that much. The foreword is so small, perhaps there are some words you want to say to the readers? And for the links to the review shops and poster, maybe link them.

Characterization [15/20]

The mom is very heartless and persistent. Throughout the story, you've made her heartless and persistent. Sehun is very opinionated but really gentle to Luhan, which is so cute! In the chapter, you've changed his personality though. You made him really....how to put this? He seems like he's all high and mighty. Kai on the other hand, his mood changes so much. He goes from timid to judging. What I'm trying to say is that you should keep your character's personalities the same throughout the story. Like Luhan's shy character! 

Plot/Originality [17/20]

The plot is very much like the regular fics. With a couple, a love triangle, struggling to find out who you're really meant to be with - there isn't really something unusual or special about it. But! But the plot is written very very well.

Mechanics (Grammar, Spelling & Punctuation) [2/5]

Everything made sense and was readable. There were quite a few mistakes though.
One mistake I saw (well it was throughout the whole story) was:
'"If you keep bugging me about this, then I'll end the call"' After you write dialogue, there should be a comma after the last word unless there is a period, exclamation mark or question mark. So this sentence is supposed to be like: ' "If you keep bugging me about this, then I'll end the call."'
Another one is: '...kept forcing Sehun to broke up with Luhan.' Sehun hasn't broken up with Luhan yet, so it should be put in present tense, which would make the word broke into the word break.
There was one on the first line of the second chapter: 'The next morning come.' It's supposed to be the next morning 'came.' The point is, there is a lot of mistakes with the tenses and I know English isn't your first language, so I won't go as hard. 

Reader's Response [4/5]

Lot's of people rooting for SeKai and some Sekai action~ you got them into the story gurl~ it's great!

Overall Enjoyment [9/10]

I really want to see how this ends up! Xiuhan and Sekai???

Bonus [+1] 

I love your A/N's!!!<3
 

Total : 59/75