Title 4.5/5:

Although your story isn't really developed yet (still at its exposition), I don't get the full vibe, but I understand it's still the begining. The title itself is quite original-- I understand that Luhan, Sehun, Kai, etc are the Grandmasters, if I am correct.

Description/Foreword 10/10 :

I enjoyed your Description. It gives a hint of the story, and makes readers want to keep reading. What is a Grandmaster? Are they immortal? I guess those were some of the questions that popped into my mind when reading it. It's short also, which is good; it doesn't overwhelm readers.

Characterization 20/20:

You did really well with developing the characters. Unlike most people, you did it in a very interesting way. You did really well with Sehun and Kyungsoo. Luhan also. The characters you put into your story has a lot of emotion, even the background ones. Although, some were cliche, I think you did well with their passions and their frustrations. I enjoyed how you revealed Kai through Sehun. I applaud you; sometimes, i have a hard time with characterizing my stories. 

Plot/Originality 19.5/20 :

I really enjoyed how you put EXO and their powers into a creative spin. I feel like not many people could, expecially with Luhan and Kai. I actually really enjoy the idea of your story.  It's unique. Also, your writing style is different (not in a bad way). It has a personal feel to it, and I like it.

Mechanics (Grammar, Spelling, Punctuation) 4/5 : 

With english as a second language, you did really well with your grammar and such more than I thought you would. Truthfully, when I see that English isn't their first language, I go easier on them. After reading your first chapter, I was surprised, so I graded more harshly. 

You aren't missing a lot of things, just some small, picky ones (sorry, I'm kinda a grammar nazi). 

Your sentence structure was a little off, which caused some dissapearing comas. Although not a big deal, it helps a lot with flow.

You also spelled some words wrong, so just be careful!

Reader's Response 5/5:

Your readers are so cute! They really enjoy the story, which is great. I can feel that they were just as intrigued as I was. Also, your interaction with your readers is great!

Overall Enjoyment 10/10:

I actually really enjoyed reading your story. It was quite interesting ( I think I emphasized enough on writing and things that I liked already).

Total: 73/75

Comments: Don't forget to credit! Oh, and thanks for requesting. You're story is quite nice (if you haven't noticed LOL). Also, sorry for the wait.