Title [9/10]
Ludos

Okay, title is awesome, I tell you. It relates to the story very well, since its all about a game of falling in love. The title's unique. I can hardly find another fanfiction that is titled Ludos. Why I didn't give you a full mark is because, I honestly think that the title is not that eye-catching. When I first saw your title, the first thing that came in my mind is that boardgame. You know that, right? The four colors, airplanes, and stuff. But still, your title describes everything that is written in your story and I can't even think about a better title. Good job on that.

Foreword/Description [16/20]

  Another high point on that, author. Your description explains about the base of the story, where you got the inspiration, the source where you write your story. I like it, really. Why? Because you don't focus on Ludos completely, you also placed the other two types of love. I also like how you enhance the color when you mention Ludos, signalling that's what you're going to write and what the story was about. Also how you put highlight of the story with quotes that the character said, also how you emphasize that the love they're going through is just a game. Love it. Reason I don't put full score in this section is because you wrote down about how Violet thinks about Kris and Kai. I think you should describe Kris more in the story since in the beginning of the story, Kris is involved in the game. So I don't think he should be just placed in the sidelines. 

Appearance [3/5]

  Your poster looks great, although I don't really understand why you chose black to be the color, since your story is about highschool teenagers falling in love, also that your story is full of cute and crack moments, so I think you should've used bright and innocent colors instead of black and white glitters (which are stars, I assume?) I also like how you differentiate your fonts between the narration and when the characters are texting. (Although you can't really see the diffrence, but yeah.) 

Spelling/Grammar [8/15]

  Well first, I understand that English isn't your first language so I can still tolerate that but you mentioned that I can go hard on you so here I go, and I apologize, but I'm a grammar nazi and I'll be strict. Oh, and I'm not really used reading stories that are in present tense, so.. yeah. Your grammar and spelling are quite bad in the early chapters, and tell you what, most people gets uninterested because of that. But as the chapters continues, I find less mistakes here and there, just some minor problems that people won't really notice. 

Okay, let's point out some mistakes :D

He apologizes again --> apologized again

raises his eyebrows --> raised his eyebrows 

that just doesn't seems right --> that just doesn't seem right

had few problem with few of them --> had a few problems with a few of them

automatically trigger --> automatically triggers

I take my sit --> I take my seat

I throw my bag on my bed and then I throw myself on it after that --> I throw my bag on my bed and then I throw myself with it after that

She breaths in --> She breathes in

squint his eyes --> squints his eyes

what if they does --> what if they did

He dont even know you --> He doesn't even know you

I'm about to lost my mind --> I'm about to lose my mind

I say its okay --> I said its okay

I become bravier with girls --> I become braver with girls

You haven't actually get the change --> You haven't actually got the chance

and off course after some errors --> and of course after some errors

Sehun continues to attact Kai --> Sehun continues to attack Kai

bagpack --> backpack

is that how you treat a guess --> is that how you treat a guest

He waives his hand --> He waves his hand

The price giving ceremony.. --> The prize giving ceremony

Plot [10/15]

  Plot is pretty interesting, but not excellent. I like how you make Violet has a problem with Amy too, not only Kai. Since most FFs have stories such as boy hates girl, girl hates boy, they're stuck in a project together fall in love and yadayada. So I like how both parties are using each other to reach their own respective goals. What I must say is your plot is quite predictable-- even though some of your plot twists caught me by surprise, but yeah I can predict most of your scenes. I'm confused about one thing though, when that Busan trip and Violet overhears Kai, I think you need to add more description into that :3

Characterization [16/20]

 Its quite different that Kai's a cheesy and warm in your story, because in  most stories, Kai is more like a cold and ignorant character. So reading that Kai is so playful and childish really brings the story alive. Although I must say it can be confusing for new readers since Kai's in a bet, so some may think about how his real personality is. About Violet, I can understand her character for being agressive and rebelious, which can brings me laughing at some of her dialogues, but I think you can specify her character a little bit, since she's a chaebol, I really think you should add elegance in her personality. Hey, just saying!

Flow [7/10]

  I like how you don't rush the scenes that you write, also that everything is going on pace, not too fast, not too slow. Although I must reccommend you to add more details to those angst scenes, because the more details, the more you can draw your reader's emotion in. And let's be honest here, seeing someone read your story and cry over your angst scenes is an acheivement, right? I like how you keep things slow with the characters, I mean like, if you rushed it, most people will think your character is bipolar :/ Since they are 'dating' and Kai's the one being oh so caring and all, but I'm glad you didn't make Kai go overboard.... so fast. Haha.

Overall Enjoyment/Reviewer's Note [3/5]

  I enjoyed your story very much, I liked the characters and how the plot goes-- even though its quite predictable, but the way you write attracts your readers in. The reason I don't put full marks here is because of your grammar & spelling and I'm not really used to stories that use present tense. I'm strongly encouraging you to continue writing with that pretty brain of yours. :D

Grand Total [72/100]

Reviewed by: halyconx ❆ ❄ ❅

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I hope you go far and wide with your writing my donut. Good luck :)