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Author: xWafflebunniiboo

Story: Chocolate love

Plot: It’s very difficult to properly grade a one shot because of its rather short length, but I’ll try my best. The plot is something that I’ve seen very often, but it’s not exactly cliché, if you understand what I mean. It progresses a bit too fast as well, though. You could’ve spaced out the pace better. For the plot, I’ll give you a 6/10, because you developed it rather well (one shots are very hard to write)

Character development: I couldn’t really get a feel for any of the characters, and if you asked me to describe each of their personalities, I wouldn’t be able to. I understand that in a one shot, you more limitations regarding how you can make a character “round” than on a full-length story, but you could’ve developed them better. 5/10

Grammar: Your grammar is exceptionally good, with very few errors, and the ones that were present were minor mistakes. Here are some of them that I picked up on (not all of them, but some):

I just stared at the small rectangular prism-like case that was put in my hand.

It should be: I  just stared at the small, rectangular, prism-like, case that was put in my hand.

There were also a lot of other comma-related errors, but I won’t point them out here, just be careful in your use (or in this case, non-use)