Hello MinWook89 here <3

Today i'll be reviewing ItsAlexaYo's Against the Clock. Baekyeol fans get your hankerchiefs ready it's a sad one ;(

 Story: Against the Clock.

Author: ItsAlexaYo

Characters: EXO, Jessica Jung

Genre: Angst, drama, romance.

Now let's start out with the easiest one:

Spelling: No problem here ^^ (10 points)

   ALL KILL!!!!

Grammar: So the grammar in itself is fine. No misplaced verbs or words but i think your story lacks flow. The transitions between the different parts of the story aren't smooth enough; they feel a bit rushed. And sometimes the punctuation is a bit off key; If a phrase is long (and especially if you're describing something) you should NOT add commas in there but these: ;  (don't know what they're called). For example:

"As he approached the shop's heavy oak door (and not the heavy oak door to the shop) he smiled as he noticed the light to the left of the window; he waved at the man sitting at the table (you already said "as he noticed" so you can't repeat it) ; he had a large book in his hand; next to him a mahogany piano (no need for "bodied") shone in the dim light; it was his mother's." 

See? That's flow. And it is essential to a good story. (5 points)

Character development: Now character development, like the plot, is always hard to rate when we haven't got the full story, so really for now it just boils down to whether your character are interesting and original enough. So i think that the fact that Baekhyun is still very affected by his family's death is a good point since fan