Hello, thank you for chosing me to review your story! ^_^

-|Bacon_Baozi|-

Author: sushi_sykes

Profile Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/493493

Story Title: (pulling) triggers

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/739743/pulling-triggers-angst-family-oneshot-psychological-sliceoflife-kai-chen

Character Development- 10/10

Since this was a one-shot, there's really nothing to say. But, I did feel Kai's emotions and that was enough.

Plot- 10/10

It was actually really really really good! I read the description and foreword and was like, "Gotta get the tissues."

Originality- 8/10

{No comment available because your reviewer is too busy crying}

Grammar- 5/10

The story was just so perfect. Except for the grammar. Your choice of words to describe Kai's feelings were great, it's just that you didn't capitalize anything. In the beginning of every single sentence, you need a capital letter. You also need to capitalize names.

Ex. he can hear his mother wailing from the entrance but chooses to focus on the limp body that was once jongdae.

Like I said, capitalizing is a very important thing.

Ex. He can hear his mother wailing from the entrance but chooses to focus on the limp body that was once Jongdae.

You didn't even make one capital letter. It just threw me off.

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