ANGEL'S SMILE - iblackstar12

Well hello! This is my first review and I hope I'm not too harsh or too soft on you. I apologize beforehand for any lines I cross. Hope you like it~ -sarahlynlee
 

Character Development:
6/10
I felt a little bit distanced from the main character, like I wasn't completely in her head at all times which made it a little hard to understand her completely. But I do see her progression throughout the story, though I would've wished for you to take it a little slower, make it a little push and pull for show to get the crowd fired up with strong emotions for the story. As for Suho's character, I'm very much in favour of it; I really like how you distance the readers from the whole picture of that character, and then later drop a bomb with the diary entries that makes hearts swell with emotions. I very much appreciated that.
 

Plot:
7/10
For the plot, I must say that the beginning wasn't the best. It didn't really catch my attention from the beginning and so on but later on, when the story began to flow in a natural current, things felt a lot easier and understandable. The story moves a little too fast for my taste, like too many cut off from the different moments that occur. Take it slow, no need to rush ^^
 

Originality:
8/10
It's not the most original story, sorry to say. But the way you write it makes it different from other stories. I thought a few things were cliché, like the cancer and the diary entries but I get that this story has sentimental value to you. But even so, I felt like your story had a lot of character and charm and it's just one of those stories you ponder about for a moment after.
But overall, I was really impressed by how much it actually moved me. I wonder if it's because of the foreword in your story, saying you were drawing inspiration from personal experiences.
 

Grammar:
6/10
I'm going to categorize this entire next section to 'writing' instead, because I'm going to take up other things as well.
I'm really