aznawzmao : The Demon Wears Glasses
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reviewed by Jangmii
Title (6/10) :
You know, I've read all the chapters you have up and I don't find the title revelant to anything. Even if it did, it's not exactly unique or eye catching. I would recommended, perhaps, changing the title?
Description&Foreword (7/10) :
The description and foreword are, to some extent, revolved around being a perfectionist. Again, I don't see the revelance to the story other then the first chapter or so where Soo-yeon got a better score than Yunho. This should be revised.
Content&Plot (18/20) :
Nothing has been revealed yet, but I feel like when Yunho finds out, everything'll be revealed. xD
Characters (7/10) :
I think you're doing a good job with the characters. Because this is written in 3rd person POV, maybe you should voice out the thoughts of characters during emotional points more and that will assist you on making the characters more 3d.
Grammar&Spelling (9/10) :
There's not many actual flaws in your writing. Maybe you should proof-readit a few times before you publish it or use an auto-corrector to annihilate any accidental mistakes.
Organization/Flow (7/10) :
It's sometimes confusing to read. I feel like everything's kind of jumbled up. So many things are happening at once and nothing's explained fully. Because it's so easily to get lost with what's happening, readers may lose interest.
Appearance (7/10) :
The poster's alright, it's nicely made and it shows the characters and the title.. but there's no mood to it. There's no feelings of mystery or anything that would draw my attention. The background is.. no offense, but the background is badly made. First off, it's too bright, it drew my attention from reading a few times. Secondly, the photo shop of the flower is really unpolished; it looks like it's half finished.
Enjoyment (17/20) :
I'm curious as to what's happening, so mad props tot you for that. It's an average story. A few tweaks here and there and it may become a great story. (:
Total : 78/100
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