BySabb : bring me to neverland
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Review by theamazimgkpopfan
Title: 9/10
The title was very sweet and I thought it was adorable, and the font you used matched it really well. BUT really only the first chapter showed that she wanted to go to Neverland
Description and Foreward: 6/10
The description was kind of boring. I really loved the quotes though, I thought that was really cool to add.
Content and Plot: 15/20
There are so many magical themed fanfics on AFF that it's hard to count
Characters: 5/10
Your characters are very cliché, they are your characters so make them YOURS.
Grammer/Spelling: 6/10
You had quite a few mistakes, I will tell you the ones I found in your character introduction for "the beauty"
"your used-to-be-bff" it would be better if it was "your ex-bff"
"stole you boyfriend" should be "stole your boyfriend"
"with your parent" should be "with your parents"
"you favors" should be "you favor"
"to keep you head" should be "to keep your head"
"on with you life" should be "on with your life"
"loosing all you love ones" should be "losing all your loved ones"
Appearance: 7/10
It was kind of plain. The posters were GREAT! BUT the photo's you used were even black and white which made it seem boring (in the description)
Enjoyment: 17/20
I actually really enjoyed it and I did subscribe :)
Total: 85/100
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