Review for ‘the elementalists.’ by expiration_date

Review by ScreamingMidget

Title (10/10) : Oh my gosh. This is AMAZING. I LOVE IT. ASDFKJLK. This is the best title in the world. Since you seem like you know what you’re doing (and the story looks all sophisticated and MHMMM, gull), I’m guessing you know all about capitalization rules and all that. I think the way you wrote it could give off a nice effect if it was like the title of a book or something (you don’t want to go with ‘The Elementalists’ with capitalization and no period?) but ‘The Elementalists’ gives a more intense vibe. ‘the elementalists.’ is too casual of a way to write down words with such impact.

Description & Foreword (10/10) : I love the description! I love that it...you know...actually describes the story a little bit. It doesn’t give too much away, either. And your foreword is AWESOME. I love it. It has a cliffhanger at the end and everything WOW MUY BONITA, BABY.

Content & Plot (17/20) : Heck yeah, gull, it’s great! It’s not too simple and basic that it gets boring. I think that there were some complex things like First Generation of Guardians and stuff that may have made it a little difficult to understand.

Characters (10/10) : I love your writing style. It gives off more information about the characters as you go along. The way they speak and the gestures they make all contribute to how well we get to learn about your characters.

Grammar & Spelling (10/10) : I couldn’t find anything! YO WASSUP. Gull, you’re on a roll. I’m getting the feeling you’re gonna be featured!

Organization/Flow (6/10) : Ooh. I don’t know about this one. I think those block paragraphs (just look at that last chapter) can make stories extremely difficult to read. Your plot is extremely complex (I’m not sure if that can attract AFF readers) and I get the need to put it all out there but try to involve some more dialogue and keep the ideas succinct.

Appearance (8/10) : I liked that you used a simple, plain background! There are people who refuse to backgrounds because ‘they’re distracting’ and NO, it’s difficult to read without a background! Our eyes see the entire page as the story instead of just that section (with words lmao) since it’s all white. Because you used a black background, I thought it looked really good! I also like the font (and the size) that you used! However, I think you could request for a more professional poster. I like it a lot (hey, you’re way better at it than I am, if that’s any consolation) but I think you could get one that suits your story better.

Enjoyment (20/20) : I loved this story! I would recommend it to anyone and everyone! You’re featured in our shop, congratulations and keep up the good work!

Total : 91/100