Author | Co-Author | Title | Story Link | Genre | Reviewer

xsnowhite | heartofgoldx | In Heaven | Link | Drama| BlackPearl96

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Title: [5/5]

At this point you only have four chapters and the story has yet to develop to were the marriage actually happens, so the title kind of foreshadows at what could possilby happen later. and personally i like just about anything that includes the word heaven lol. not only does it sound good it fits the whole drama theme you have. 

Story Layout: [10/10]

One can really tell a lot of thought and effort ws put into the look of the story as a whole. Your background is simple put fitting and it matches your poster. The poster is quite noice as well. two tumbs up ^.^ 

Foreword & Description: [10/10]

The description is simple yet inticing. and a quote or two for the foward to draw the reader is is an excellent choice

Plot: [20/20]

I can see that this will most certaintly go somewhere. I personally love stories about an arranged marriages but youve thrown in quite the twist. keep up the good work guys ^.^

Characterization: [7/10]

i guess more description would be nice. your chapters are long but id like to know more about the settings, have a set feel you know?

Originality: [5/5]

What a twist to the typically arranged marriage, WITHOUT making it an angst ^.^

Flow: [10/10]

the flow is excellent. By the way you guys might as well be writing a novel, lol, I could never write chapters so long; but you guys didnt just drone on and on so it was very good.

Grammar & Spelling: [24/25]

Not much to say here at all. Your dicton was excellent but on the rare occasion you did use the wrong word forms e.g. pouring when it should have just been pour.

however nothing major. good job

Overall Enjoyment: [5/5]

This one is kinda personally suzy was just to.... her for me... personally. i found her to irritating, im sitting there like " gaaah move on, he didnt even say goodbye" and "whatdo you mean you cant be friendly? no one said love him, if you have to get married o him at least be friends, stop being so uuugh!!" You guys seriously played with my feels -.-

Bonus points: [4/5]

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