[R] Wind of Ashes
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WIND OF ASHES
STORYLINE BY: ANVAYADAR
REVIEWED BY: STARRYGIRL_143 [Drugon Multi Shop]
Title [5/5]
You picked a pretty good title! When I first found out the title, the first thing that came to my mind was the story’s root is betrayal. Well, my guess was partially right, since not of it would have started without betrayal. I really like your title.
Foreword [4/5]
I docked one point here. When I read your foreword, there were some parts that weren’t actually clear. Some parts still have to process to my mind.
Grammar & Spelling [18/20]
I’m docking two points here. I just find it really intriguing on how you use your parentheses. Some phrases and sentences I found with parenthesis are better off with commas. But overall, that was all I can see. Your grammar is pretty good.
Plot [17/20]
I wouldn’t say that the plot is unique or, because I’ve read dozen of literary classics and stories with this kind of plot although I did find something different in your story. There’s this plot twists that kept your story high. That was when Kris came into the scene. I
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