[R] Half A Man
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Reviewer: recklessdragon
Customer: CherryL101
Title [4/5]
I’ve not seen this title anywhere on AFF before. However, there is a lot of ‘half a …’ titles out there.
Foreword [4.5/5]
There is a spelling mistake, but other than that, the foreword seems good. The spelling mistake will not be taken into consideration here; it’ll be under grammar & spelling. It is a bit short and kind of seems like a movie trailer.
Grammar & Spelling [15.5/20]
Your grammar is really good and you have a wide range of vocabulary although there are many really insignificant mistakes.
‘I thought he was having a melt down’ when it should have been ‘I thought he was having a meltdown’. (chapter 1) and ‘overhead’ instead of ‘over head’ in chapter 3. Overhead and meltdown does not need to be separated.
The good part is that although you have quite a number of mistakes, all of them are so hard to spot.
You have several spelling mistakes as well.
It should have been ‘centering’ in your foreword, instead of ‘centring’.
It should have been ‘suppressing’ in chapter 2, instead of ‘supressing’; ‘hemorrhaging’ instead of ‘haemorrhaging’.
‘fetal ball’ instead of ‘foetal ball’ (chapter 3)
There are other mistakes as well, but there’s too many to point out. I believe most of them are careless mistakes because your voca
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