OC- 25.75/30

I felt that Nameless was wonderful. She had a solid reason for doing what she did in the pool, and there was a reason behind her actions. I understand that the shield that she pulled up to protect herself from others was sarcasm and spitting frustration, but sometimes it was too consistent. She let Sehun in too early, and there wasn’t much of an explanation, which I would’ve liked. When her shield was down, it was bursting and emotional.

Also, when she was alone, her thoughts were consistently sarcastic or irritated. Moments of calmness, or sorrow, or maybe even deep thinking that didn’t lash out could have enhanced her character.

At the beginning of the story, I thought of Nameless as a kind of injured animal- hiding under her shelter and lashing out at anyone who was too suffocating, or tried to hurt her again. However, she never really broke down. When she was upset, she had a lot of words to say, and was again sarcastic. It was like her normal emotions, but with a steroid shot.

K-Pop Characters- 8.5/10

Sehun was great. I felt like a bit more of an outcome of his backstory (more of what happened to his personality and characteristics after his dad left) as well as some character could have been added into him; more emotion other than frustration and dread. Nevertheless, I did like the sort of ambiguity and fittingness of mentioning that he ‘ran away from his problems’. I also enjoyed the feeling of desperation that he emitted at the end.

Overall- 34.25/40, or 85.625%

Definitely one of the better stories I’ve read. Keep it up!

~RiverFawn