Charmingusta! Your cheesecake is ready!
Cheesecake Archiveof purple sky and the stars we hold
Description
jungkook wasn't one to have his guard down when it came to things, people or any existence besides himself; but when it came to taehyung, he started pouring ink on papers to tell a different story—a story of a boy with belief, faith, and love.
Foreword
this was heavily inspired by shawn mendes--never be alone and taehyung's scene in i need you :)
thank you for dropping by!
review #1 credits to CutieSica101 from WHIMSICAL; a review shop
review #2 credits to BlackRosesTears from LIGHTSABER REVIEW SHOP
review #3 credits to Stoic Bread from TRAVERSE SHOP - REVIEW AND PROOFREED
For charmingusta:
Title (4/5) - How original is your title and how much does it relate to the story?
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It's pretty but I...I don't get it. But it's pretty!
Description/Forward (10/10) - how much did it catch my attention and relate to the story?
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It was short but so is the drabble so no problems here
Plot (20/20) -
Originality - how unique and different is your story?
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It's certainly something different than I typically read. It's kind of like a poem.
Believable - in your story's world, how much do I believe this is what is happening?
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Yes. I don't understand what happens but...yes..?
Characters (28/30) -
Voice - how strong is your narrative voice/the character's voice?
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Your writing voice is very poetic I like it
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One quick thing: Taehyung’s urgent message takes place too fast. I would like a little more build up. A little more of a conversation. It would be more powerful that way and just BAM something happens
Development - how much does the character grow in the story?
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I don't think there is supposed to be much of it and that's okay. Drabble typically don't have them
Personality - how alive do they feel?
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They feel alive to me!
Setting (10/10) - how well-built and represented is your setting in the story?
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There isn't much setting but again it isn't really needed
Mechanics (15/15) -
Flow - how does the story pace itself and move along?
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I loved the flow. It was perfect. Especially the song lyrics and messages it's ugh it was flawless
Grammar/Vocab - how many errors were there?
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No problems here
Misc. (9/10)
Enjoyability - how much did I enjoy your story?
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I AM SO HEALTHFULLY CONFUSED AND I LOVE IT 10/10 MATE
Satisfactory - am I satisfied with the way it is progressing/ended?
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DID TAEHYUNG DIE I THINK HE DIED DID HE DIE I JUST UGHHHH I'M SATISFIED BUT I WANT TO UNDERSTAND BUT AT THE SAME TIME I DONT
Total (96/100)
- THIS IS HOW YOU WRITE A DRABBLE. :D I want more like this from you. Or maybe not. Make it stand alone so it stand out more.
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