Title (9/10)
  Since your story is only beginning and consists a number of 8 chapters as of the moment, I can't say if it fits the story. But I do see it's connection with the storyline. It is also my first time seeing this title so it did gave me that fresh and unique feeling. Also, it's only two words, not too long not too short. Your title is also a certified eyecandy. Kudos for you for coming up with a cool title! 


Description & Foreword (9/10)
  Your description and foreword were used neatly. The description gave the readers a brief summarization of the story, at the same time, it leaves us curious on why Junmyeon is dreaming of the boy. 
  The forward is neatly arranged as you gave us a cheerful greeting and a simple explanation on what's to come when we read your story; the credits are also placed neatly and the links are not all over the place. 


Graphics (9/10)
  I'm no graphic artist but I can tell if a poster is good if it's good. The poster you used for your story is kinda cool, it has this mysterious vibes like the story itself, also it's pretty simple. However, don't take this the wrong way but I'm a bit creeped out when I saw the blue eyes of the child. The left eye was slightly bulged.


Character Development (5/10)
  Junmyeon is totally a Gary Stu (Gary Stu is a male version of Mary Sue). He's like this goody-two shoes with nice grades, lots of friends and a pretty girlfriend. He seems like this one kid that would donate at a charity for Christmas. He's too nice. Basing that on the real world, I'm not sure where to put him. I kinda find it annoying sometimes, and it makes me cringe a bit too. But when he started being totally kind, I guess I've grown a bit of a soft spot for him.
  Jong In's character is just adorable! Although the bullying part was kinda disturbing, I am quite interested in his character. He just hold that type mysteriou