Pink Laces
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INFORMATION REGARDING THE STORY STORY TITLE: Pink Laces
AUTHOR: shashashy
CHARACTERS: OC || Cha Eun Woo
GENRES: Romance, Fluff
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Shop Requested: (っ˘ڡ˘Σ) Cheesecake
DESCRIPTION:
N/A reviewTITLE (4/5)
The title was a bit misleading since looking at it at first glance, you would have never thought that it's actually a modernized version of Cinderella. I'll give you kudos on that, since it did not reveal much, yet is surprisingly has great connection with the plot.
But if I were to be a normal reader looking through stories, the title would have not caught my eye- which goes to say that it isn't that attractive.
DESCRIPTION/FORWARD (8/10)
The description was alright but quite frustrating. It was going good, really, you were describing they were enemies blah, blah, blah but then suddenly you jumped into talking about these four events that has something to do with gowns and I was like, what? It was a good start, but I didn't like how you ended it. It seems so natural but then abrupt. I think a few descriptions between the cats and dogs part and the ball part will do.
The forward is okay, I guess. I mean, there's the characters, the deep paragraphs and all those gizmos. I personally like how you just put the pictures of the protagonists, their names and nothing more. I don't like having it spoiled for me, and I'm quite glad you didn't described them or said their personalities in the forward at all. In that way, the curiosity will remain.
PLOT (18/20)
I was honestly bored when I saw what you're doing, but then I saw that you're using a contest prompt, so let's see how you stayed true to your choice. The prompt was Cinderella and I was kinda glad that you only applied the shoes part. Making them enemies was pure genius! It was a good twist to the story, really. Cin
AUTHOR: shashashy
CHARACTERS: OC || Cha Eun Woo
GENRES: Romance, Fluff
~STORY LINK~
Shop Requested: (っ˘ڡ˘Σ) Cheesecake
DESCRIPTION:
N/A reviewTITLE (4/5)
The title was a bit misleading since looking at it at first glance, you would have never thought that it's actually a modernized version of Cinderella. I'll give you kudos on that, since it did not reveal much, yet is surprisingly has great connection with the plot.
But if I were to be a normal reader looking through stories, the title would have not caught my eye- which goes to say that it isn't that attractive.
DESCRIPTION/FORWARD (8/10)
The description was alright but quite frustrating. It was going good, really, you were describing they were enemies blah, blah, blah but then suddenly you jumped into talking about these four events that has something to do with gowns and I was like, what? It was a good start, but I didn't like how you ended it. It seems so natural but then abrupt. I think a few descriptions between the cats and dogs part and the ball part will do.
The forward is okay, I guess. I mean, there's the characters, the deep paragraphs and all those gizmos. I personally like how you just put the pictures of the protagonists, their names and nothing more. I don't like having it spoiled for me, and I'm quite glad you didn't described them or said their personalities in the forward at all. In that way, the curiosity will remain.
PLOT (18/20)
I was honestly bored when I saw what you're doing, but then I saw that you're using a contest prompt, so let's see how you stayed true to your choice. The prompt was Cinderella and I was kinda glad that you only applied the shoes part. Making them enemies was pure genius! It was a good twist to the story, really. Cin
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