Second Meeting Part III

My Angel

Hii~ I am sorry for the wait and having to use chapter parts... And yes... there is going to be a part IV... heheheheh.... sorry... ^^"

 

    Well, I hope that you all have been enjoying this and I should have part IV done soon and I have already ALMOST finished chapter seven, so look forward to that~

 

    Welp~ Enjoy this chapter and please, please, PLEASE tell me what you think! I need your opinions so I may improve

 

    Thank you~

 

ANYWAYS! 

 

ONTO THE INQ AND SEJIN!

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Chapter Six: Second meeting

 


    At the moment JunQ was unconsciously leaning against InSoo while watching SeYong and ChaeJin as they played on the, somewhat, rusted playground equipment.

 

    SeYong was standing behind ChaeJin, pushing him on one of the swings. ChaeJin would giggle every time SeYong would touched him.

 

    "So, JunQ," InSoo snapped him out of his thoughts, "I've been wondering... How old are you? I mean, you look really young and I ChaeJin keeps calling you... uh, 'Umma'? So, are you, like, a young parent or something? Please tell me you're not his father? I mean, if you are, I don't mind, but...You two are too close in age!" InSoo started to talk faster and faster, lowering his voice with each word as he looks away.

 

    "No, no, no! I'm not REALLY his father! I'm his older brother. He just calls me Umma because he doesn't have one. And I'm only eighteen years old." JunQ cut off InSoo, explaining his and ChaeJin's relation to each other.

 

    "Oh!" InSoo sighed in relief, " oh! I'm twenty years old. And, well, that's good to know! I thought you had, you know... started a family early..." Insoo smiled, slightly embarrassed. 

 

    JunQ laughed and blushed slightly, feeling a warm, fluttering sensation in the pit of his stomach. 

 

    "Heheh... Yeah... I'm not really ready to be a dad, just yet. Although, I am basically Jinnie's dad." JunQ rambled on.

 

    "You mean, you are his UMMA~" InSoo teased JunQ by lightly poking the tip of his nose.

 

    "Okay, okay, don't get cocky, InSoo!" JunQ lightly pushed his hand away.

 

    "It's InSoo-HYUNG to you! Remember, I'm TWO years OLDER than YOU!" InSoo proudly stated, his hands on his hips, "Aish! Kids these days!" 

 

    "Fine! You are LOUD and ANNOYING, InSoo-HYUNG! Better?!" JunQ puffed out his cheeks.

 

    "YES! It is!" InSoo mimicked JunQ's pout, but didn't look nearly as cute. "Wait, what did you say to me?!" InSoo exclaimed as the realization of what his dongsaeng had called him hit.

 

    "Nothing!" JunQ made an even deeper pout and attempted to look angry, but faltered before slipping into a laughing fit.

 

    "You little brat! Hey! Stop laughing at me!" InSoo whined before 'attacking' JunQ, knocking him onto the ground. JunQ pushed InSoo over and rolled on top of him, then InSoo did the same. 

 

    They continued doing this, repeating the same action, for about ten minutes before JunQ got tired and let InSoo stay hovered over him. InSoo stared down at JunQ laughing at their silliness.

 

    JunQ laughed along with InSoo, but paused, taking a few seconds to catch his breath, before saying, "I think that WE are the REAL children here...heheh..." Then JunQ burst into another laughing fit and InSoo laughed at his remark too.

 

    Soon silence engulfed them. JunQ closed his eyes and sighed as he relaxed, gaining the most peaceful feeling he's had in years. InSoo took this moment and leaned down planting a soft, but firm kiss on JunQ's lips. JunQ didn't open his eyes and welcomed the affection InSoo was giving him. The kiss was long and tender, sending chills down the teen's spine.

 

    InSoo was about to deepen the kiss when all of a sudden the two heard an earsplitting scream and a...

 

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    HAHAHAHA! I gave you all a cliff hanger! 

 

    I want you all to comment what you think is going to happen next(besides you InQ-Fluffy-King and Animegeek689)!

 

    I will give a shout out to whoever gets it AND I'll give them 10 karma points! AND not just that, but the one who gets it right can have one of their o.c.'s appear in either the next chapter the one after or another one of my fanfics! So please, comment away with your ideas~

 

THANK YOU FOR READING AND REVIEWING~

 

Sorry it's short(like usual...)

 

See ya~

 

~YuuYuuHaruka

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Amalya #1
Chapter 11: Interesting story overall. It's not typical and I rather enjoyed the way you had the setup of JunQ and ChaeJin being brothers; the same thing with GunWoo and SeYong. They make rather adorable siblings any which way you look at it. Poor Insoo being left alone except as a sort of adopted brother. hehe

One of my big questions currently would be, when did their mother die? Maybe I'm being picky about details, but usually, if neither of the children are 'adults,' they tend to go to a close relative. I also felt it was strange for ChaeJin to perpetually call JunQ 'Umma.' I mean, he had a mother previously, so shouldn't he still be big brother, unless ChaeJin was just an infant at the time, which would bring me back to the first question.

Beyond that, the story moved a little fast and it felt like they all became really close almost immediately. There was lots of blushing and ducking of heads and 'want to see him again' thoughts pretty much right off the bat. It was cute, but it felt a little forced. haha Moving on, I think the idea was nice though. Having JunQ meet InSoo and all that made for a good pairing and there was a lot of ground to build on between them. The fluffy bits of SeYong and ChaeJin were stupidly adorable and almost ridiculous in their extremes but some kids are like that. lol

I'm inclined to like the alternate ending more, not just because it's less depressing, but because it makes more sense in my head. I'll get to that in a second. You could certainly build a sequel off of either but I would recommend slowing things down and taking your time more. You don't have to power through the story in as short a space of time as possible. Let the characters grow and develop a bit. Feel free to give us more insight from their perspective too. Your inserts are humorous at times, but they do somewhat detract from the focus of the story.

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DGNA_Forever #2
I just saw your poster. I LOVE IT!!<3
DGNA_Forever #3
Chapter 11: I loved this ending, too. It was sweet and cute. I would love to see a sequel to either one, and this story is great. Thank you! Saranghae<3.
InQ-Fluffy-King #4
Chapter 11: INQ SMUFF INQ SMUFF INQ SMUFF INQ SMUFF INQ SMUFF!!!!!
Plz and thank you senpai
DGNA_Forever #5
Chapter 10: It was a beautiful, wonderful, sad journey and I loved the story. It was beautifully written. Thank you for writing it. Saranghae<3.
NurulHs_ #6
Chapter 10: I really like the story. Its so cute and sad in the end, good job author-nim.
DGNA_Forever #7
Chapter 9: I'm in shock right now...You killed them!! WOW...Nice update, though. I can't wait to see where you will go from here. My babies, though...*cries*<3<3.
InQ-Fluffy-King #8
Chapter 9: WHYYYYYY!!!! WHY SIWONS GOD WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
DGNA_Forever #9
Chapter 8: Yah! I was reading and you end on a damn cliff-hanger? Boo...I like how InSoo isn't shy about kissing JunQ, at all. This chapter was nice...until the cliff-hanger:( Evil. Update soon, please:)
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