Utopia

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Title: 5/5

Kudos to you for choosing a single-word title with good meaning.

Description: 9/10

It could be worded better in a few spots, but other than that, I love it.

Plot: 30/35

You’ve established a strong first chapter, but I can’t necessarily score accordingly yet due to the short nature of your story. So far, it’s good, and if you keep up the way you’ve been writing, then these points are well-earned.

Conflicts: 8/10

The only conflict so far would be the fact that he’s in his mind, and it’s drawn-out just right. The mystery hits the reader right in the chest. That might just be my personal opinion, but I do believe fantasy and mystery (and even psychology) lovers will love this.

Originality: 10/10

I don’t often see stuff like this here on AFF, and it’s great that you’re trying to write this from a dream.

Grammar and spelling: 10/15

You tend to switch up your tenses (you use present and past all at once) and it can get confusing. Your use of large words will confuse non-native speakers, so try to find some more common, shorter words to replace the lesser known words. Your spelling is flawless, though. All you need for the rest of it is editing.

Characters: 4/5

There’s not too many, you focus on your protagonist, and you bring in an interesting mystery man (Myungsoo). The only thing