Tattooed

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/404950/tattooed-gang-infinite-sunggyu

Title: 5/5

'Tattooed' was a really good title. It's relevant to the story, catchy and easy to remember.

Description: 5/10

You gave way too much information in the description. I was able to guess a lot of the plot from that. And 'Guaranteed' is spelled incorrectly. That is a major turn off to readers.

Plot: 20/35

Farfetched at best, unrealistic, at worst. The time line is crazy. By day number eight, she had been beaten up several times, rescued from her own parents, given a tattoo and fallen in love? In eight days? The escalation of events is not plausible. Her starting at a new school and making enemies for no reason in what? 20 minutes? The attachment to Infinite is too instantaneous. This is a girl who is abused by her parents, why would she trust anyone so easily? Even if they did save her from a beat down, why would she just fall into their arms like that?

That reminds me. If she is a new student at a new school, how does she already have this circle of friends? Ari, HwaYong and MiCha, specifically. If she knew them from before, you never mentioned it.

Conflicts: 6/10

I took points because the conflicts weren't well defined. They just happened. The beef with 2NE1 came from no where. The beef between JangMi and her step father—well you said he resented her being from her mother's previous marriage . . but how is that her fault? Shouldn't he be taking that out on her mother? The beef with her mother is another mystery. Her mother seemed complacent in the beginning, but then she became an active participant in the abuse. That was never explained. I get that SungGyu and CL used to date, but why they broke up is never really explained. Y