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206 Miles

By: Shazalleys

Title: 5/5

Perfect. It's relevant to the story, short and sweet.

Description: 7/10

This isn't really a description, it's quoted text from the story I was about to read. And then, you give away the of the story in it. I would suggest you cut the quotes out. The 'It's just you, me, and 206 miles” is enough. It's intriguing.

 

Plot and Originality: 30/45

The plot was nice. Two people meeting up on a train ride from Busan to Seoul. Good. The level of originality was lacking for me, and how long it took to get to the point. It seemed to drag out longer than necessary.

Conflicts: 9/10

I liked the conflict. It's an issue of bad timing for them and you didn't try to overcomplicate it. Good.

Grammar and spelling: 8/15

I don't believe I saw many spelling errors. What I did see, was missed words.

They were close to each other.

Depending on his mood

It's been a long time since the last time I came here, isn't it?

"Yeah, I wonder if maybe Seoul is way better than here

Things like that.

Characters: 4/5

You explained that Luhan was a jokester and seldom serious person, but I didn't get a lot about your OC.