Username 
AshleyFang
Profile link 
http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/573813
Story Title 
The Next Husband

~ Reviewed by monkeyCSaw ~

First impression: 8/15

Right off the bat, I'm somewhat intrigued. This story idea is unique to me.
 

-title: 4/5

Could be more creative and flowery (I'm a huge er for poetic titles tbh) but it gets the job done and neatly summarizes the story.
 

-description + foreword: 7/10

The description of the story itself is slightly off putting but unique in its own way. It's the first story of its kind I've ever seen, honestly.

Language: 10/20

I can definitely tell you're not a native English speaker. However, it's still clear enough for me to follow along (most of the time).
 

-sentence structure & grammar 5/10

Again, your gap in English is apparent. At times I find myself lost but usually your grammar and structure are enough so that I can get the gist. Still, would rec you find a beta reader whose first language is English. They'll help you a lot!
 

-vocab, punctuation, & spelling 8/10

I would dock more but English is not your first language, so I gave you some extra points for that. And your punctuation/spelling is actually really good. Your grammar needs a lot of work though.

Storyline: 25/35

I gave points for the unique nature of the story line, but the characters kind of keep it from being as great as it could be. You'll see what I mean.
 

-plot & flow: 20/30

Your story actually flows really well. Though slightly fast paced