Friendship or Love?

Author : Budakseget68

Genre : Angst

Status : On-going

Title (8.5/10)

Your title is okay. It matches the story and plot well, but it's not too extraordinary. It will make people think that it's another casual love story, which is actually not true, because your story is really new and different. I understand you, because sometimes I have some huge problems with the title too... But it's not that bad, not at all. If you keep it, it's great because you wouldn't want to request a new poster all over again, right? :)

Description/Foreword: (8/10)

Your description is supposed to be the summary for the story, and I have seen no summary :/ It's just a simple sentence that people are going to get bored of too quickly ("Friendship or Love? What is the best choice?" ). You know why? Because I have seen this sentence in nearly all the stories of Asian Fanfictions. You could do it a little bit longer, it's too short... And the foreword is supposed to be an explanation about the characters's usual life and the beginning of the story. But I do like the fact that you put every character's thought in the foreword ^^ It's interesting...

Grammar/Language (12/20) 

Chapter 1:

Uee thought: 'Yah...Uee...Taecyeon was only your friend. Please stop it!'

Uee thought: 'Yah...Uee...Taecyeon is  only your friend. Please stop it!'

Taecyeon sit beside her.

Taecyeon sat beside her.

Taecyeon: "I heard that there is a new student at your class. Who is she?"

Taecyeon: "I heard that there is a new student in your class. Who is she?"

Uee back off.

Uee backed off.

Uee: "She just a girl. Moreover, you're already had me. Isn't that enough?"

Uee: "She's just a girl. Moreover, you already have me. Isn't that enough?

Uee thought: 'Why did my heart felt so hurt?'

Uee thought: "Why did my heart feel so hurt?'

Taecyeon and Uee ran around the park and still didn't exhausted.

Taecyeon and Uee ran around the park and still didn't feel exhausted.

They stopped for awhile and they sat at the bench nearby.

They stopped for awhile and then sat on the bench nearby.

Taecyeon: "Of course! I'm handsome man."

Taecyeon: "Of course! I'm a handsome man."

There are more mistakes but I'll only write these ones... Your grammar is not that bad, but still in every 3 or 4 lines, I have found some errors :/ I know that English is not your first language, but still...  The sentences that are supposed to be in the past tense, you put them in the present. And the sentences that are supposed to be in the present tense, are written in the past. Please, don't take these words to the heart :( As much as I want to be really really nice to you, I have to do a good and correct review. Please understand me. ^^

Characters (20/20)

Your characters are litteraly how they are really supposed to be in this type of story. BRAVO :D Uee is the shy and insecure, but also outgoing type of girl... Taecyeon is the confident, handsome and friendly boy he needs to be... Yubin is the kind of girl that everybody wants to hang out with :) Good job. T.O.P is the hot, rich and famous student in school, and clearly all girls would WANT to fall for him. You made an excellent job with the characters, I congratulate you my dear friend! ^^

Originality/Storyline (19/20)

Your storyline is also great :D It's not just a typical crush story, it's a new and different Fanfiction. I like the fact that each one of them (Uee & Taecyeon) has to find a match for the other, and in the end, clearly they'll fall for each other ^^ It's cute... Yubin is dating Taecyeon, but Taecyeon starts to feel jealous about T.O.P and Uee. Awwww <3 The fact that you made the most popular guy in school (T.O.P) fall for Uee is amazing. What can I say? I fell in love with your storyline...

Overall (67.5/80)

 Everything that I said, don't take it to the heart please :( :) Your grammar is not perfect, but still, you're better than other people :D And 67.5 is actually a great note ^^ Keep writing this wonderful story, and never give up... Be strong <3 Taecyeon Oppaaaaaa, I litteraly LOVE him ^-^

-Danielle