Kiss The Blood Off My Hands

Author : Sapphirethorns12

Genre : Angst | Romance | Marriage

Status : On-going

Title: (10/10)

The title fits with the story a lot. It made me curious about it, and it makes me want to stay tuned with this Fan Fiction. While reading the story, I was really amazed of how you tied this title with the story. I was also thinking that it's nearly also like a saying or a quote... It's like the main character is begging her love to take her back, and it clearly explains the whole plot :D BRAVO...

Description & Foreword: (9/10)

Well, to start, your decription as I saw has a saying by "Pablo Neruda". And I gotta say, I like that saying a lot, and it really fits Ahri and Sehun's situation. The rest of the description is a good work too. About the Foreword, it has a really deep meaning but I got lost a little bit, but then when I read the story, I understood. If you want, make it fit a little more with your story. But since I already read the story, I am in love with this Foreword, so nice job ^^

Grammar & Language: (20/20)

So... You're american and it's really obvious cause both your language and grammar are perfect. There are some expressions that I adored. I'll give you some examples: "Another past tense. Why am I still living it?" or "My body betraying me, yet again" and so on... In general, you should be a professional writer, and I'd be the first one to read your books and novels.

Character: (18/20)

You have three main characters: Ahri, Sehun and Baekhyan. First of all, let's talk about Ahri's character. Ahri's character is clearly a grown woman's character. She thinks deeply, and is very emotional. That's a good thing for the story because it makes it more interesting.

Second of all, Sehun's character is great indeed. He is depressed and it's obvious. He misses Ahri a lot and it's also obvious. They're both sad and longing for each other. It's easy to say that they're not too alike, but they look like they do belong to each other.

Third of all, I am lost with Baekhyan's character. Five years ago, he was the cute and nice gentleman Ahri fell in love with. But now he is forcing her to do things, and she doesn't like him anymore. I guess people do change, but what's his reason? If it's because Ahri is still in love with Sehun, it's okay... But I'm a little lost though.

Originality/Plot: (18/20)

I do like "Love Triangles", as much as I LOVE your plot. It's well arranged and everything... But you didn't write a clear plot in the description. Sometimes, people have to know a little about the story to read it. But it's a new and different story, it would be really good if made into a drama. People should think about that :D And also, there are some things I didn't understand. When Ahri was talking to Sehun during the wedding, she didn't seem surprised or nervous at all... Is this part of her character or something? And, how could she dial Sehun's phone number using her husband's phone. He could now...

Overall: (75/80)

I know that nothing is perfect, but your story is really near to perfect :) I liked it and I'm willing to read it until the end if I do have time. The only things that were not so good were some events in this story, but however, good job ^^ Please, comment about my review. I'm kinda new here, hehe. Thanks for requesting :D

-Danielle