First Kiss

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FLATTERS & FLUTTERS HOMEPAGE PROFILE STORIES RUBRICS FAQS INFORMATION REGARDING THE STORY STORY TITLE: First Kiss
AUTHOR: JESLEN
CHARACTERS: Kim Jong-in (Kai) and Song Ga-In (OC) FEAT Oh Sehun (Cameo)
GENRES: Comedy, Fluff, Romance
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DESCRIPTION:

Never been kissed,
Song Ga-In promised herself that whomever she will share her first kiss with will be her first boyfriend.
And  she had already set her eyes on Sehun oppa. But she had never counted the fact that saving Kim Jongin will drastically change everything...

reviewTITLE [4/5]

I can never suggest a better title for this story. I mean, the story revolved around that first kiss thingy, right?  However, the title seems a little plain and common for my liking, which resulted me docking one point.


DESCRIPTION/FOREWORD [10/10]

  Your description and foreword is accurate. It's really good. I honestly can't get the italicized words in your description out of my head. It didn't gave away that much, which made it even better.


STORY PLOT [27/30]

  The plot is not the plot I read often, so it's not common. However, I've read three stories with similar plots to this, which I think is purely coincidence, so that can be said that your plot is familiar. The plot was rare though, it was a pretty good choice. I like how you set it at the right time.


GRAMMAR/SPELLING/VOCABULARY [19/2
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JESLEN #1
Chapter 6: Oh hi! Im sorry Ive been away too long from this site and I only read this review just now. Thank u very much for your kind words. It wasnt harsh at all. In fact, I didnt expect to receive such score considering that this isny my exact style of writing. Haha. I prefer writing dark stuffs, but somehow I wanted to see how I can do romcom stories. Thank u very much again and I really agree with everything that you've said. The reason why there seems to be missing info about Sehun and Yoona is that their story will revolve in the short sequel which Ive thought of making a long time ago. Haha it's just that work's been making me too busy.
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