High school fever

Description

Jaehyo hated High school. Just one more year and he will be half way across the country on his way to his favorite college. He just had to suffer through the last few months of torture and then he would be free forever. But it might not be too late yet?

Foreword

I always wanted to write an highschoolau! Anyway I hope you like it! :)

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chewychoc-o #1
KYAAAAH I LIKE IT
andreveronica #2
Chapter 1: This is so good asdfghjklñ I was waiting for one of those fics when the bad guy stayed with the principal character but no >u<
The end was so
ChocolateDragon #3
Chapter 11: Wahhh how can you leave me hanging like that TwT I look forward to the sequel!
sarahjang #4
Chapter 11: Ahh I loved this story, sad that its over but I can't wait for the sequel♥♥
xScarlette #5
Chapter 10: YAS! Jihoon! :D
ChocolateDragon #6
Chapter 9: /facepalm right after I just commented too...
WOOOOOOO Jihoon is here!
ChocolateDragon #7
Chapter 8: Squee! This is really good! Bear with me as I try to critique your work~
There are a few plotholes, those which I hope you are aware of (like from other comments? Didn't check though sorry ><) so you may wanna check those out. Secondly, try to have a clear distinction of character of narration and the actual characters. Some descriptions sounds normal in narration, but a little awkward in character speech, unless you make that their personality. Like the "just let me in Minhyuk" which sounds a little awkward in actual speech as a metaphorical sort of thing, I mean it could sound more appropriate if you're talking about penetration (ahem). Some other language issues like in an earlier chapter, "make his homework" you mean do his homework? :P or maybe it escaped the filters of the proofread?
And uh, maybe this is just me, but I got the feeling that they're disgusted with Jaehyo being gay in the first few chapters. I begin to understand that its just Minhyuk being a little and perhaps even being the gay one, thus tryna combat his own unacceptance of himself by rejecting and estranging himself from Jaehyo. Correct? :P but my point is, you could be a /little/ more clear about the situation. Just a suggestion.
There is something interesting going on with Minhyuk though, other than perhaps liking Jaehyo part. I like that :D
also where is PO ;_; can't wait for him to appear, wonder what character is going to get with a quiet one like Taeil?
Sorry for such a long comment ._.
xScarlette #8
Chapter 8: oh my god! I'm gonna die xD how dare he! D:< well...I'm waiting for some taepyo :D the tags bruh
KrazyKowaiGG #9
Chapter 8: I love this so far ^_^
sarahjang #10
Chapter 5: It was a bit sad but I'm glad they're talking again and hopefully sorting things out ^^
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