Surprise

YOU AND I MEMORIES THAT LASTS FOREVER

  surprise 

After packing their stuff, minwoo and dongwan head to somewhere in minwoo car.

  3:50 am

Dongwan was yawning and said " where are we going?". Minwoo smiled and said " somewhere that are only you and me". Dongwan continued to yawn and said " I am sleepy". Minwoo pulled over and take a blanket to cover dongwan. Minwoo got the blanket cover dongwan and said " sleep I wake you up when we arrived". Dongwan pecked minwoo and go to sleep. Minwoo start to drive again.

  4hours Later

  Dongwan opened his eye and saw himself surrounded by nature. But minwoo is nowhere is to see. Dongwan start yelling but there was no answer. Dongwan keep calling minwoo but there was no answer. Until then dongwan start to cry. Tears keep flowing and yelling still continue, but it all stop when a hand back hug him.

Dongwan turn around and saw minwoo smiling. Dongwan shout " where are you? I was so worried". Minwoo cupped face and said " sorry! I preparing the bed and end up sleeping there. I am sorry". Dongwan shake his head and said " no! I am the one who sorry. Minbong ah you should have sleep, you don't need to wake up so early. Yesterday you also don't get enough sleep. My poor Minbongie".

Minwoo smiled and pulled dongwan to sit down on the grass. Dongwan pulled minwoo head to his lap and let minwoo sleep there.  Dongwan was playing with minwoo hair when suddenly minwoo talk. Minwoo said " wannie do you want to adopt kid?". Dongwan said " of course. You don't  want to?". Minwoo shake his head and said " good to hear that you want to adopt kid. You know that I really love kid right?". Dongwan giggle with a happy tone and said " you want a girl or a boy?". Minwoo said " a girl". Dongwan said " want to name her?". Minwoo said " I want her name to be unique". Dongwan smiled and said " what about lee hana?".

Minwoo smiled and caressed Dongwan's cheek and said " my husband is so smart". Dongwan said " that why you need to eat a lot of walnut! You special stupid!". Minwoo yelled " yah~~~~~".  Dongwan leaned down and kiss minwoo and said " my one and only babo". Minwoo giggle and pinch dongwan hands. Minwoo said " you're so chessy!". Dongwan smirked and said " but you love this guy". Minwoo tsked and pulled dongwan into the house.

When they go into the house, dongwan just froze.  The house is full of their picture. It just simply amazing. There was so many picture. Dongwan tear fall down. Minwoo said " this our new house! Specially made for you and me". Dongwan hugged minwoo and said " thank you, minwoo. I love you". Minwoo wrap his hand around dongwan and kiss dongwan crown. Minwoo said " I love you too".

Get ready for the next chapter! Warning ^^  

I am going to crash this couple so be ready for it. I hope that you guys won't hate  me. Thank you so much for subscriber. Also I am sorry for not updating. I will try my best to update the story as soon as possible I finish writing ^^ 

thank you~~~~~

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shhhinhwaCJ #1
Chapter 2: Ahhhh ahhhh hot!!!!
shhhinhwaCJ #2
Chapter 1: Kyaaaaa!!!!!! This is so sweet! I read those comments below. It's m rated next? U should rate it on the foreword! Not by the chapter! (It's easier to attract readers like me!) ><
Deng_Yat #3
Chapter 11: Waaahh...dong wan is back~~~i love him in this..despite he did something before...bjt finally woodong~~
Im glad minwoo held dong wan's hands...

Thank u for updating^^
cglcb1 #4
Chapter 10: It looks better with paragraph breaks now but you still need to improve with capitalization and grammar.
If you have microsoft word, maybe type your chapter there first because it has grammar and spelling check (if you select the right language).
Good work!
My personal comment on this chap: where the hell is dongwan >< is he having vacation on some mountain lolzzz
well, hope woodong meet up and make up soon xD
ShinPM98 #5
Chapter 9: Oh noo...Minwoo fainted, Dongwan is leaving...RicSyunggg pls do something to WooDong >///<

Thanka for updated :)
cglcb1 #6
Chapter 9: ok, I've read 8 chapters in one go
Objective comment:
Your use of past tense is inconsistent and it gets jumbled up with present tense a lot.
For conversational dialogues, I think you should use a new sentence instead of writing everything in the same paragraph.
After the apostrophe/quotation mark, the first word should be capitalized.
Names within sentence should be capitalized as well.
There are some spelling mistakes.
The story progress is pretty quick, maybe put in more details such as emotions, actions, series of interactions and inner thoughts.
The plot is quite good.
Subjective comment:
I like the story. I know it's hard to write a lot and in detail since my first few fics were also short, the pace was very quick but you will improve as you write more. Just paint the scene in your head, then try to describe the main focus, then maybe more descriptions for the surrounding, etc.
I don't really like to insert honorifics and romanized Korean words to fic because it's just weird but then again, everyone has different style so it's not something to press on.
As I'm very shinhwa biased, I really love it when someone write a fic about shinhwa so keep on writing! Don't be discouraged by the amount of views, subs and comments. Just write pieces that satisfy yourself. You're writing quite well for a non-english speaker.
Deng_Yat #7
Chapter 9: what...??dong wan...u r really...u just left...??
minwoo!!!waaaaaaaaa....T0T....
dong wan...come back quickly...minwoo needs you...huhu T^T
thanks for updating btw..
anbarasi #8
Ah well :-D:-)
Deng_Yat #9
Chapter 7: Lol^^
Funny proposal from the two of them..but it's sweet^^
Woodong,b happy forever!!
Thank you for writing n updating^^
bloodyhim #10
Thumbs up!
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