FINISHED REVIEW (FR) : THE WORDS UNSPOKEN - GIRLY_AUTHOR-NIM457

Please pick up your review by reading this, dropping a comment and crediting us (reviewer and shop) using our banner (link back to the shop.)

TITLE: The Words Unspoken

AUTHOR: girly_author-nim457

MAIN CHARACTER(S):  Jeon Jungkook (BTS) & Lee Dayoung (OC)

GENRE(S):  Angst, mostly fluff

SYNOPSIS: Lee Dayoung and Jeon Jungkook were caught in a sweet summer romance but after the summer ended their relationship became long-distance. Things start to get rocky because they both can't bring themselves to voice out their feelings so now they're in a make or break situation.

STORY STATUS:  Oneshot, completed

REVIEWED BY: strawberryhyun_

Title
Your title is cliché and there are a few number of stories with the same title as yours. Accordingly, this could result to being seen as a recurring fic, or one among the many others - something plain. Relevance-wise, I think it could really be associated with the plot and it introduces the dilemma your characters are about to face.

 

Appearance
Your poster kinda fooled me. In your poster Jungkook is crying while looking down; a signature pose for someone who's regretful or heartbroken. I assumed that the flow of the story would be from fluff to angst, though more of the latter than the first.  There are a lot of shops that could help you with your story's poster so you might want to check them out.


 

Description/Foreword
The description is really short. It introduces the readers to the conflict that is about to happen in the story. Again, it made me think it's fluff turned angst since you also put the fluff om your tags. You know, there are readers that aren't fond of angst. So I suggest you put in a little bit of sugarcoating on your description without revealing too much. Just give the readers a little peak on the fact that even though problems arise when you leave words unspoken, if you try to just muster up the courage to fight for your love then it'll surely be solved. Other than that, I think your description is alright.

I know it's hard to actually put in something in the Foreword section especially if it's a one-shot. But it wouldn't hurt if you put in a snippet of thoughts from any of your characters, be it Dayoung or Jungkook. It will lure the readers more to read your story.

Characterization

So you have Dayoung, Jungkook and Taeyeon. I absolutely liked how you developed their characters realistically.

Dayoung is that socially awkward girl who is new to romantic relationships and is very much insecure. The situation which is a part of the problem, boys not being a part of the equation and focusing only on studies, is so realistic because in some Asian countries, they value studies above everything else. And then there's her insecurity. That too is normal especially in her case where she is in a relationship with an idol. She'd question herself why of all girls, he chose her or the thought of being expendable or easily replaceable always stays on the back