FINISHED REVIEW (FR) : CONSTELLATE - PROJECT ALICE

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TITLE: Project Alice

AUTHOR:  constellate

MAIN CHARACTER(S):  All APINK members

GENRE(S):  thriller, zombie apocalypse

SYNOPSIS:  In the year 2018, April 18, a virus broke out that spread throughout the world within days and made people turn into wild, ferocious creatures. Seven strangers will unite to fight against project Alice.

STORY STATUS:  On-going chaptered story.

REVIEWED BY: strawberryhyun_

Title

Your title seems fitting to your plot and it is a non-recurring title, considering the fact that there are thousands of fics published in the AFF site so that's a huge plus on Originality. It's quite an eye catcher because people would wonder what Project Alice means and will then proceed to your Description to check your story out.

Appearance

You don't have a poster to back your story up and it's not really an essential in making a good story. However, in cases like yours where the title doesn't give out much impression on the plot (because no one knows what Project Alice means except you), posters are really helpful. They say do not judge the book by the cover but we can't deny the fact that a cover really attracts potential readers! So I would suggest you go get some poster made that would show the seven girls looking tough and ready to kill with either zombies or the supposedly ELITE just far behind them. However, it is still up to you if you follow this or not. ^^

Description/Foreword

Your description is straight to the point and concise. It gives the readers a clear perspective of what is to come and what the story is all about. I don't have any issue so far in your description area except where you said “Seven strangers will unite to fight against the Project Alice” but your tags only contained apink and its six members. I know Apink started as a seven-membered group but new stans of APink might wonder who the seventh stranger was. So I suggest you put in yookyung’s name in the tags section. ^^

Also, it would be better if you included a snippet or two from your story to paste on your Foreword. It encourages the readers to further dig into the story, for them to press on that Next button and start reading the story. I suggest you put the part where Yookyung's plane was hit by the missile launched by the ELITE Headquarters and the strangers (APink) walking up to her when she was already losing her consciousness from the crash. Or you could pick out your favorite part that you think could interest your readers.

Characterization

Your story has lots of characters and to be quite honest, no one stood out. I cannot pinpoint who the main characters are because you seemed to try to put everyone in the spotlight, but the end result isn't what it's supposed to be. Everyone seemed like an okay character, but it's just that. There are conversations where I get lost as to who's speaking because they talk the same; they don't have a character of their own and basically don't have their own color or individuality.

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