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FINISHED REVIEW (FR) : PEARLLIN - NIGHT CHANGES

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TITLE: Night Changes

AUTHOR:  Pearllin

MAIN CHARACTER(S):  Oh Sehun, Kim Sarang (OC), & Kim Jaerin

GENRE(S):  Romance & angst

SYNOPSIS:  Sehun met Jaerin in his highschool some eight years ago. They had been best friends since then. In Sehun's eyes, they really were only friends but Jaerin had crushed on him the first time she saw him walking down the hallway of the school building. Sehun, however, had a liking towards Jaerin's younger sister, Sarang. Sehun disclosed the very thing to Jaerin but never really noticed the hurt look in her eyes every time she looked at him. Jaerin got to know that she had a terminal sickness and that her days were limited. She started writing all her wishes on a dairy, everything she'd like to do before she had to leave the world. She was the sunshine in Sarang's life, the one who took care of her after their parents' death and proved to be a responsible elder sister. Sehun always saw the younger sister in Jaerin and took care of her like a older brother. He never really had a proper conversation with Sarang, the girl he had learned to love day by day since she was really shy. Jaerin had always wanted Sarang to be happy and end up with a responsible man; that is why she never really gave Sehun a clue about ber feelings towards him. She died a month before the date the doctor told her. She never let Sarang or Sehun know about her sickness and that is why it was a shock to both of them when the doctor declared her dead. Sarang soon found the diary that Jaerin had left. Her wishes were still unfulfilled. She showed it to Sehun and the both decided to fulfil her wishes by themselves and complete the diary.

STORY STATUS:  On-going chaptered story.

REVIEWED BY: iamsashimeh

 

 

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The title doesn’t really catch my eye because it doesn’t really make sense (if I’m being blunt here), I feel that it doesn’t really convey the gist of the story, in a sense? I only mildly understood the title after reading that Sarang and Sehun spend a lot of time together at time.

 

 

 

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eunh0o #1
Chapter 3: hello, i was wondering if you're still accepting reviewers! if so, i would like to apply to be one! I've had a bit of experience beta-reading my friends' essay and also i'm a writer myself! i just wanted to try out something new and would be very glad to offer my services to your team! thank you, hope you'll give me a response!
pandatypewriter #2
Chapter 26: Thank you so much for the review! Thank you hocbaidi! It was very insightful and has given me a good guide to how I should write my future stories! Thank you so much and I will credit today!
girly_author-nim457 #3
Chapter 24: Thanks for the review! It's really helpful because I always feel like my writing can get better so thank you so much for the helpful advise, changes will be made! I credited/picked up the review ^^
*** Special thank you to strawberryhyun_ for taking your time especially since you had midterms (hope you did well and the delay was no problem)
Moony_Kat #4
Chapter 23: Hi there! Thank you for your review! I really appreciate the feedback although maybe I was expecting a bit more of it on the characters at least, but I do understand that you have other stories to read and review, so still, I am contented with your review. Thank you again!
I picked up and credited :)
Tripping-Panda #5
Chapter 22: First of all thank you so much to the review shop to give us an opportunity to get our stories reviewed and then thank you so so much to sekaimi who've spent their precious time on reading and reviewing my story STRANDED.
The review gave me such a great insight on what I can do to improve my writing, and also a good confidence boost. Which you sometimes need and I feel really inspired to keep writing after this review. You have many good points! I am going to redo the description to fix the mistakes and I went through my story to fix the few grammar mistakes you pointed out! I go through my own stories and when you've read and written something many times you easily miss the mistakes, so thank you for helping me with that!
About the characters, thank you for noticing that! I'm actually happy that you're not familiar with NCT, because then you can focus on the characters of the story and not just them as a group. I did focus on creating the characters with more depth and also be a little realistic with the development of their relationships.
You're right about the dialogue, maybe I've become used to see that when I read and just adapted to it, I'll try to experiment with my writing and avoid doing that.
I really love having multiple characters, but it's hard, I try to do it with balance and I am happy to hear that it worked out in the end!!
I know the ending is terrible, you should've seen me writing it, took me so long to actually convince myself this was the way it was gonna go down.
I appreciate the detail of your reactions to each chapter!
Your review was excellent! Really nice job of presenting it both very informative and inspiring. Good balance of compliments and constructive critism, which is perfect. Good luck with your other reviews! Thank you again! <3
I have credited the review shop and sekaimi !! <3
ExoDoll #6
Chapter 21: I have credited the reviewer and the shop!
ExoDoll #7
Chapter 21: Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story and giving me feedback. I'm glad that you enjoyed it and I understand about the whole proof reading thing. I need to get a beta reader soon for my grammar as most of the chapters are messily written in train/trams/buses or small lunch brakes and I don't really have time to go through the chapters after writing them. Thank you once again for your time and effort.
I will make sure to credit the shop and the reviewer in the story :)
Moony_Kat #8
Chapter 20: Hi there^^ Thank you very much for the detailed review, I wasn't expecting it, but it's really helpful! I do tend to only proof read once before posting it, so I know that I have a lot of mistakes, which is great that you pointed them out :) I do feel you that the plot feels a bit rushed, but that was the entire point behind it: to give only moments in time and leave the reader wondering what exactly happened in between. It's a new style I tried... got to admit that this was meant to be a full story, but I decided against it because I have too much on my plate right now, so that might be another reason why the plot feels a bit rushed^^' Anyway, I really do appreciate your insight and hope you've enjoyed it!
I put up the credit and will correct the mistakes you've pointed out! Thank you again <3
kamski #9
Chapter 17: Hello! I am here to pick up my review! Thank you so much for your insight, I'm glad you enjoyed the story! I was worried about the pacing and the character portrayals, so you've really put my mind at ease ^^
Thank you so much for your review, I've picked up and credited!
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