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TITLE: The Wrong Guy

AUTHOR:  -midnightbae

MAIN CHARACTER(S):  BTS Kim Taehyung & Kang Hyeji (OC)

GENRE(S):  Fantasy, romcom, schoollife

SYNOPSIS:  Kang Hyeji became desperate for love, she was offered a love spell. How could she not use it? Especially when she's liking the guy for at least 3 years but what if it landed on the wrong guy? Not to mention, the guy she ever hates.Will she ever find a way to make it disappear? or will love spark between the worst mistake?

STORY STATUS:  On-going chaptered story.

REVIEWED BY: heartlesscity

 

 

Title

When I first saw the title, I thought that the girl would fall for the wrong guy, but I was wrong. It referred to this ‘love spell’ that was cast upon the wrong guy. Regardless, I think it matches the plot either way.

 

 

Appearance (Graphic/Poster).

The main cover looks alright to me, it’s cute. However, I saw a different poster on the first chapter and I think that one is more suitable as the main cover because it includes the OC.

 

 

 

Foreword/Description.

Description: After reading the description, I thought: ‘Hyeji will definitely end up with the guy she hates’ because that’s usually the way it is in a manga. I used to read manga a lot in the past. Maybe that’s also why this part of the plot sounds familiar to me. Anyway, considering my first thought, your description gives a bit too much away. Other than that, it’s short and clear which is more than enough for a plot like this one.

Foreword: Usually, this section would consist of a small preview of the story itself, but I think it was a good idea to not do that in your case as it might spoil more than it should.

 

 

 

Characterisation.

In this section, I will only comment on the characterization of Hyeji and Taehyung, because I haven’t been able to see much of the other characters yet.

Frankly speaking, both Hyeji and Taehyung’s character is far from real. I’m sure you’re aware of that as well. However, I don’t think that being realistic is what you are going for here since this is just fanfiction – and anything is possible! Not to mention, the love spell. Putting that aside, Hyeji has a boyish image which makes her unattractive while Taehyung is one of the most popular guys at scho

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eunh0o
#1
Chapter 3: hello, i was wondering if you're still accepting reviewers! if so, i would like to apply to be one! I've had a bit of experience beta-reading my friends' essay and also i'm a writer myself! i just wanted to try out something new and would be very glad to offer my services to your team! thank you, hope you'll give me a response!
pandatypewriter
#2
Chapter 26: Thank you so much for the review! Thank you hocbaidi! It was very insightful and has given me a good guide to how I should write my future stories! Thank you so much and I will credit today!
girly_author-nim457
#3
Chapter 24: Thanks for the review! It's really helpful because I always feel like my writing can get better so thank you so much for the helpful advise, changes will be made! I credited/picked up the review ^^
*** Special thank you to strawberryhyun_ for taking your time especially since you had midterms (hope you did well and the delay was no problem)
Moony_Kat
#4
Chapter 23: Hi there! Thank you for your review! I really appreciate the feedback although maybe I was expecting a bit more of it on the characters at least, but I do understand that you have other stories to read and review, so still, I am contented with your review. Thank you again!
I picked up and credited :)
Tripping-Panda
#5
Chapter 22: First of all thank you so much to the review shop to give us an opportunity to get our stories reviewed and then thank you so so much to sekaimi who've spent their precious time on reading and reviewing my story STRANDED.
The review gave me such a great insight on what I can do to improve my writing, and also a good confidence boost. Which you sometimes need and I feel really inspired to keep writing after this review. You have many good points! I am going to redo the description to fix the mistakes and I went through my story to fix the few grammar mistakes you pointed out! I go through my own stories and when you've read and written something many times you easily miss the mistakes, so thank you for helping me with that!
About the characters, thank you for noticing that! I'm actually happy that you're not familiar with NCT, because then you can focus on the characters of the story and not just them as a group. I did focus on creating the characters with more depth and also be a little realistic with the development of their relationships.
You're right about the dialogue, maybe I've become used to see that when I read and just adapted to it, I'll try to experiment with my writing and avoid doing that.
I really love having multiple characters, but it's hard, I try to do it with balance and I am happy to hear that it worked out in the end!!
I know the ending is terrible, you should've seen me writing it, took me so long to actually convince myself this was the way it was gonna go down.
I appreciate the detail of your reactions to each chapter!
Your review was excellent! Really nice job of presenting it both very informative and inspiring. Good balance of compliments and constructive critism, which is perfect. Good luck with your other reviews! Thank you again! <3
I have credited the review shop and sekaimi !! <3
ExoDoll
#6
Chapter 21: I have credited the reviewer and the shop!
ExoDoll
#7
Chapter 21: Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story and giving me feedback. I'm glad that you enjoyed it and I understand about the whole proof reading thing. I need to get a beta reader soon for my grammar as most of the chapters are messily written in train/trams/buses or small lunch brakes and I don't really have time to go through the chapters after writing them. Thank you once again for your time and effort.
I will make sure to credit the shop and the reviewer in the story :)
Moony_Kat
#8
Chapter 20: Hi there^^ Thank you very much for the detailed review, I wasn't expecting it, but it's really helpful! I do tend to only proof read once before posting it, so I know that I have a lot of mistakes, which is great that you pointed them out :) I do feel you that the plot feels a bit rushed, but that was the entire point behind it: to give only moments in time and leave the reader wondering what exactly happened in between. It's a new style I tried... got to admit that this was meant to be a full story, but I decided against it because I have too much on my plate right now, so that might be another reason why the plot feels a bit rushed^^' Anyway, I really do appreciate your insight and hope you've enjoyed it!
I put up the credit and will correct the mistakes you've pointed out! Thank you again <3
kamski
#9
Chapter 17: Hello! I am here to pick up my review! Thank you so much for your insight, I'm glad you enjoyed the story! I was worried about the pacing and the character portrayals, so you've really put my mind at ease ^^
Thank you so much for your review, I've picked up and credited!