His Confusing Touch by MissPandaBBY
Coffee Delight Request Shop [Closed]Reviewer: kpoplistener
Title: 2/5
I didn't know why you chose that as your title. It didn't really relate to the story, because I felt the only thing that touched Baekhyun was Chanyeol's words.
Appearance: 5/5
Very clean. I liked how you kept it simple and elegant. The poster was well done too.
Foreword and Description: 5/5
Awesome description. It didn't reveal the whole content of the oneshot, and it was very well presented. I liked how the pink font didn't blind me. Nice description.
Characterization: 10/10
I don't know why I could grasp the characters so easily in a oneshot rather than in a chaptered story. I could easily understand the characters, and I didn't have to think twice. Baekhyun was the one confused on how Chanyeol perceived him. Is he Chanyeol's friend or more? I liked how you kept him confused until the ending when he finally got it. As for Chanyeol, he was playful and he covered their relationship up in a nice and non-problematic way. I liked the character personalities.
Originality: 4/5
It wasn't original, for there are many stories like this on AFF. However, the way you wrote it is different and left me with a happy smile.
Plot: 14/15
Surprisingly, you have a stable plot, for a oneshot. The main idea is to get Baekhyun to understand that Chanyeol loved him, but not as a friend. All the events led up to the last, and all the events fitted perfectly. It was not confusing, and I appreciated that.
Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation: 25/25
No grammar, spelling or punctuation mistakes. Great job!
Flow: 10/10
You've got a nice flow going, even though you jumped from event to event. It wasn't confusing, for you were detailed in every event you wrote.
Enjoyment: 15/15
I ship BaekYeol/ChanBaek.
Bonus: 5/5
For the clean appearance and cool writing style.
Total: 95/100
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