Title: [2/5]

The title is very original and unique. But I don't think it matches your story very well. I don't really see the connection from the title to the story and it was pretty rough. I thought it was missing something grammatically also. Personally I think you could've thought of a better title.

Description/ Foreword: [7/10]

The story itself is very unique so your description makes the reader want to read more. I like how you kept it simple and easy to understand. It is a great balance since it gives out enough but not too much about your story. The foreword is very...well... forward. Its right to the point. I think it would've been better to add more information about your characters so the reader would know the characters more, but overall its very simple and easy so I thought it was good.

Originality: [10/10]

I thought that the originality was really good! I've never read a story like this before and I liked how you didn't do the usual cliche love story. I found that your story was very very original.

Plot/ Writing: [19/30]

The plot wasn't bad but it got me confused sometimes. your writing style was so-so. sometimes you stated the obvious.  Instead it would be better to leave your readers to figure it out themselves. but overall it is not bad so if you try to improve the way you write by using some literacy skills, such as giving hints to the reader, but not stsing the full story, I feel it would be better and draw your readers in more.

Characters: [9/10]

I liked how each character was not what I expected them to be. Minho was very mysterious and it made me think of the character very much.  Each character was unique and fun to know more about.

Grammar/ Vocabulary: [18/25]

Most of your grammar is correct. You have barely any spelling mistakes, and it shows that you edit your work thoroughly. But one bad point in your story is the constant change of past and present tense. Some parts of your story is in present tense but it changes to past tense.  I think you should look over your story again to change the mistakes. Another common mistake is when you use paste tense is the wrong way. For example; I saw Suzy pull out her phone and answered it. the first part "I saw suzy pullout her phone and..." was fine, but the second part does not make sense. usually when you use past tense first the second act would be in present. The correct grammar for this sentence would be I saw suzy pull out her phone and answer it. Such as this there were a few more where you did the same mistake.

Overall Excitement: [2.5/5]

Personally it wasn't very exciting, but that's just my option. I feel that this story will be well liked by people that are into things like this, but it is not the type I like. 

Extra (Poster/Background/Chapter Titles/Chapters Length): [2.5/5]

The poster and background match your story very much. I love the colour and it gives a different kind of feel to your story, kinda mysterious but still warm and loving. I love it. I think you should add chapter titles to let the readers get a little glimpse of the chapter. It's kind of dull when all I see is "chapter 1" when I click the next chapter. The chapter lengths are ok but sometimes too short. I advise you to use word count or something and promise the reader a set amount of words at the least.

Total Points: [70/100]

I hope I helped you in any way, im sorry if I was mean/rude/critical. please do not take it to heart. and I am very sorry for the late review.

Reviewed by: Momo

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