Calling SmileUKwonKitty || We Got Officially Married
Chocolate Cupcake's Review Shop || Closed
Title: [4/5]
Good title, 'We Got Officially Married', it fits the story well. I like it. Raises suspicion and makes people want to read. Good Job.
Description/Foreword: [7/10]
I loved your very first paragraph. It really made me want to read the story. Sounds like a professional writer wrote it. But you kind me lost me in the next few chapters.
Originality: [6/10]
I wouldn't say that it was the most original story in this website because many, many people write about marriages and stuff. But I liked the story. Good, like many others but not that original.
Plot/Writing: [20/30]
Your writing and plot is excellent. Good phrasing, scenes and transitions. Nice story.
Characters: [3/10]
Sorry, but I got confused a lot. I had to think really hard to remember who the characters were. But I like that you chose the band B.A.P.
Grammar/Vocabulary: [23/25]
Very good grammar. Periods, commas, hyphens, colons, exclamations and quotations were used where needed. I would say that grammar was your strongest point in this story. Keep it up.
Overall Excitement: [2.5/5]
Good Job but I wasn't that excited. I got bored easily but there were some exciting parts too. Improve in this area.
Extra (Poster/Background/Chapter Titles/ Chapter Length): [4.5/5]
Excellent job on this area. You have good pictures throughout the story. Nice font. It was unique. The length of the chapter wasn't too long. That's good or it would have bored me easily. So, ha ha good job on that. Good poster. But you were missing chapter titles. But some people just want to keep it as Chapter 1 and Chapter 2 and stuff, so that's not a problem.
Total Points: [70/100]
So, Ta-da. In all honesty you did a very good job. I liked your story. It was average. But much better than a few stories I've read. Not naming here. Good luck for the future.
Reviewed by ForeverLT11
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