Burning Snowflakes

Description

After a somewhat strange kidnap, you arrive at a mysterious old mansion in the middle of a snow storm. Dumped there intentionally by your 'kidnapper' you approach the heavy door and let yourself in. But who awaits you when you get inside? Why were you brought there? What did they want from you and would you ever escape?

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okay everyone, this is my first fanfic. 

i came up with this idea late last year and was writing it in my own time, but thought i would upload it here and see what people thought of it?

i have a bit of writer's block lately so i haven't been able to progress too far with the story, but some comments or feedback might spark my imagination or encourage me to continue with it. thank you!

i don't really read fanfics myself so i have little idea of what makes a good or bad one, so please leave plenty of feedback.

also; i originally wrote this story from a third person narrative but decided it would suit second person better and so i went through changing the narrative. however if you find it written in the wrong narrative at any point come let me know ^^ 

Foreword

 

No one had stepped over these grounds for a long time. The snow that blanketed the garden was untouched and crisp white. As one would walk down the invisible path, they would be greeted with a large metal gate, black coils of iron weaving through the air, blocking the mysterious yet beautiful mansion within its bars. The building ahead stood tall, the dark concrete sculpture of brick towering a shadow over the snow covered lawn. Suddenly, a sound broke the cold and silent air, a car engine cutting through the soft mist and pulling up to the gates. The shiny black Chevrolet’s driver door opened, and an equally black and shiny pair of shoes stepped out on the crisp snow. In seconds, the tall and dark figure opened the back door, reaching in to pull at the panicked individual sat in the back. He pulled you by the arm with such force that you flew out on to the cold ground.

After a somewhat strange kidnap, you arrive at a mysterious old mansion in the middle of a snow storm. Dumped there intentionally by your 'kidnapper' you approach the heavy door and let yourself in. But who awaits you when you get inside? Why were you brought there? What did they want from you and would you ever escape?

Perhaps the boy you meet inside is someone to be feared, or maybe, he just wants to be loved.

Comments

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Maria_Maraki
#1
Chapter 15: Please update!!! Is beautiful story!!!
SophieAnnaLee
#2
Chapter 15: are you still there? are you okay? you haven' updated in awhile. Please tell if you will continue with this fanfic :(
SophieAnnaLee
#3
Please update!!
MIOKURA #4
When are you going to update???
foreverwilllove2112 #5
Pshhh I bet he's lying! He definitely remembers and is pretending not to!
I SEE RIGHT THROUGH YOU LEE TAEMIN! XDD
IU_Yeppeo
#6
TT^TT HE'S PROBABLY SOME VAMPIRE, HEALING LIKE THAT.
IU_Yeppeo
#7
Yay~ you updated! Heheh~ *feels happy* You know what, I'm shocked. I HAVE BEEN KISSED....HEHEHE...
IU_Yeppeo
#8
UPDATE THIS OMG OMG OMG OMG THIS IS THE BEST STORY I HAVE EVER READ. GOD. GOD. OMGGGGGGG. Your detailed writing style is what makes it so interesting, as well as the theme and mood of the story. It's really... how did you say it... captivating, holding a certain amount of force over you. I can't look away from this at all. I'm glad I found it. And I'm glad I hugged Taemin-baby^^
TheEpikBabo #9
yayy two updates! :D so happy to read your story again ^^ bagah! though D: leaving me with such a cliffhanger! >< This story is going really great and I hope you've figured something out for it. I know it's so hard to keep a story up and going when you're kinda winging it along the way XD (me) but all the best! This story is too good to be stopped now. Looking forward to your next update! :)