Burning Snowflakes
Description
After a somewhat strange kidnap, you arrive at a mysterious old mansion in the middle of a snow storm. Dumped there intentionally by your 'kidnapper' you approach the heavy door and let yourself in. But who awaits you when you get inside? Why were you brought there? What did they want from you and would you ever escape?
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okay everyone, this is my first fanfic.
i came up with this idea late last year and was writing it in my own time, but thought i would upload it here and see what people thought of it?
i have a bit of writer's block lately so i haven't been able to progress too far with the story, but some comments or feedback might spark my imagination or encourage me to continue with it. thank you!
i don't really read fanfics myself so i have little idea of what makes a good or bad one, so please leave plenty of feedback.
also; i originally wrote this story from a third person narrative but decided it would suit second person better and so i went through changing the narrative. however if you find it written in the wrong narrative at any point come let me know ^^
Foreword
No one had stepped over these grounds for a long time. The snow that blanketed the garden was untouched and crisp white. As one would walk down the invisible path, they would be greeted with a large metal gate, black coils of iron weaving through the air, blocking the mysterious yet beautiful mansion within its bars. The building ahead stood tall, the dark concrete sculpture of brick towering a shadow over the snow covered lawn. Suddenly, a sound broke the cold and silent air, a car engine cutting through the soft mist and pulling up to the gates. The shiny black Chevrolet’s driver door opened, and an equally black and shiny pair of shoes stepped out on the crisp snow. In seconds, the tall and dark figure opened the back door, reaching in to pull at the panicked individual sat in the back. He pulled you by the arm with such force that you flew out on to the cold ground.
After a somewhat strange kidnap, you arrive at a mysterious old mansion in the middle of a snow storm. Dumped there intentionally by your 'kidnapper' you approach the heavy door and let yourself in. But who awaits you when you get inside? Why were you brought there? What did they want from you and would you ever escape?
Perhaps the boy you meet inside is someone to be feared, or maybe, he just wants to be loved.
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