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THIS REVIEW IS PURELY JUST BASED ON MY PERSONAL OPINION. I DO NOT REPRESENT THE ENTIRE READER'S POPULATION Title: Romantic And Idol
Author: Haroro_Fan
7/10 ─ Story Title: There's no need to put the 'a' in 'And' in block Letter. 'Romantic and Idol' is sufficient. Since it's a story related to an actual TV show, maybe you can add a 'Season 3' at the back, since the show already had 2 seasons beforehand. There's nothing eyecatching about the title, but to those who have actually watched the TV show and loved it, they'll most likely click the story. In other words, your title is more target oriented, meaning that it only catches the attention of those who have actually watched the show.
But on the other hand, it may mean 'Oh, what happens when a idol fall in love' type of concept. It may catch the readers attention if they thought of it that way. So, not much problems with the title.
8/10 ─ Description/Forward: Okay, the forward on its own was alright, the reader would know that it's related to the show with the same name but there are some grammatical errors. I'll do that for you.
After such a long time, TVN is finally bringing back one of their show that fans are all waiting for. .... 4 girls and 4 boys have been chosen...
It's better to write '4 girls and 4 boys' than '4 girls and boys' because readers might misinterpret it as there are a total of 4 girls and boys, not 8.
And as for the sentences under the character introduction, there are a few grammatical errors or typos here and there too. I'll do all of that for you here.
".... I hope that there is someone who can capture my heart on this show. Hahaha"
"..... If I see someone with a nice thigh, I will stare at her thigh...."
"I like a girl that only takes care of me. I don't want her to look at other boys and at the same time, she must know how to make a delicious hot chocolate for me...."
"A sweet and feminine girl...."
"...I might fall in love with someone who is different..."
"I have never dated anyone before, so I might come off as dense."
"A guy that looks smart and neat! .... But, even if I found him, I don't have a chance to date him."
"I like.... a guy that has a slim physique...."
7/10 ─ Writing Style: I'll be brutally honest here, I personally do not favor your kind of writing style in this story. (Yes, I've seen your other stories.) But that's just my personal preference, no worries. I don't mark with reference to my preference. Anyway, I suppose your writing style in this story is supposed to c
Request: Story review
message: 64/100!
THIS REVIEW IS PURELY JUST BASED ON MY PERSONAL OPINION. I DO NOT REPRESENT THE ENTIRE READER'S POPULATION Title: Romantic And Idol
Author: Haroro_Fan
7/10 ─ Story Title: There's no need to put the 'a' in 'And' in block Letter. 'Romantic and Idol' is sufficient. Since it's a story related to an actual TV show, maybe you can add a 'Season 3' at the back, since the show already had 2 seasons beforehand. There's nothing eyecatching about the title, but to those who have actually watched the TV show and loved it, they'll most likely click the story. In other words, your title is more target oriented, meaning that it only catches the attention of those who have actually watched the show.
But on the other hand, it may mean 'Oh, what happens when a idol fall in love' type of concept. It may catch the readers attention if they thought of it that way. So, not much problems with the title.
8/10 ─ Description/Forward: Okay, the forward on its own was alright, the reader would know that it's related to the show with the same name but there are some grammatical errors. I'll do that for you.
After such a long time, TVN is finally bringing back one of their show that fans are all waiting for. .... 4 girls and 4 boys have been chosen...
It's better to write '4 girls and 4 boys' than '4 girls and boys' because readers might misinterpret it as there are a total of 4 girls and boys, not 8.
And as for the sentences under the character introduction, there are a few grammatical errors or typos here and there too. I'll do all of that for you here.
".... I hope that there is someone who can capture my heart on this show. Hahaha"
"..... If I see someone with a nice thigh, I will stare at her thigh...."
"I like a girl that only takes care of me. I don't want her to look at other boys and at the same time, she must know how to make a delicious hot chocolate for me...."
"A sweet and feminine girl...."
"...I might fall in love with someone who is different..."
"I have never dated anyone before, so I might come off as dense."
"A guy that looks smart and neat! .... But, even if I found him, I don't have a chance to date him."
"I like.... a guy that has a slim physique...."
7/10 ─ Writing Style: I'll be brutally honest here, I personally do not favor your kind of writing style in this story. (Yes, I've seen your other stories.) But that's just my personal preference, no worries. I don't mark with reference to my preference. Anyway, I suppose your writing style in this story is supposed to c
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